not really much i can say on improvivg it that hasn' already been said. i wrote a poem similar to this when i lost my mom. work on your vocab and the flow from person to person when you're talking about seperate people's emotions (may just be me cuz this poem is so deep). my favorite piece i've read so far. keep em comin'.

check out my poems

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=200947
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=202397

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"I don't want to be deep... I want to feel deep and use that feeling to express depth itself..."
-Konchance

my poetry:
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