Nice drop man. The flow was consistant, I can't recall that it fell off in any given place, so i'm just going to say it didnt. You mentioned in one of my threads how you had a problem with stretched lines. Man, thats not a problem it's a style. Alot of people mock long lines because they can't get them to flow and remain consistantly on point. You did, however, and that's good. Don't change your style because a few people can't write well. True, longer lines do give you more room to do things with, as apposed to short consise lines, but it matters not.

The imagery on this was very good, structure was on point. Your rhyme scheme was maintained, though simple. Your internals were pretty much all there, though I would argue a larger vocab and more complex rhymes would have been better, that's my opinion.

The last verse, the closer, was very good. I didnt see it coming at all and it made me think for a minute, I like that. I think the last two lines bore the most imagery and emotion, cos' it was real.

I wouldnt say it was one of the best pieces i've read on the OM, though it was written well. Keep it up bro, and good luck in SS. Thanks for the feed.

Peace.

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