word dawg thanx loads for that Zero LMAO

typing as I listen....not feeling intro the "hahaha" is jus corny...quality needs work....first verse...opens wit good energy but it starts to whine down as it goes on..an the flow is repetitve...need to change hook....lyrics wasn't decent....hook is decent...it was mixed poorly...cant make out words...ok 2nd verse opens wit good energy again....but it lacks emotion...ya jus yelling instead of conveying a real emotion....need to work on effectively using influctions....flow on this verse was same as first...def showing great improvement...keep dropping man....1

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Hahaha...hmmm it gets annoying after while lmao...sowwy cutie...

Aight, you come in strong but try to keep it up throughout the entire verse ya feel. Lyrics be cool, I like the concept haha. Can up the rhyme scheme, throw more similar sounds n multis in there to make it smoother and more complex ya feel. I can understand everything now actually...but quality needs work...cannot wait till you get em new mic...

Hook is a nice add-on but I couldn't always understand it because beat was coming up louder than his vocals.

Second verse, basically same as first...gotta get that strong delivery throughout entire verse because in beginning you always like BLAOW but then it wears off ya know...Flow be on point, you definitely improving there...

Just try something different with your rhyme scheme, throw some attention grabbers in there, keep that emotion strong throughout entire verse...but you improving like whoa...keep it up...real feed, no hate but you know that already

Collab? Soon...without a doubt...

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Takes me a sec to get used to the accent... If you listen to how RZA ripped that beat, he was kind of rhyming outside of bars, thats why its so slow and gloomy when you try to rap normally on it and that is why you prolly felt like you were dragging on while rapping that...
Prolly a bad beat choice for the flow you chose...

I think on ya next track, you should aim for a faster flow, go hard out on the multis and try to clean up your production a bit.. At times ya mic sounded like a telephone...

But yeah, thats my 2 cents.....

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Like the intro. Spitting is solid and raw. usually the english accent stears me away from the track, but i liked this flow. hook is solid aswell.

nice track.