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Old 07-29-04, 03:05 PM   #1
Nyghtmare
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Cool U kno!!(an original song made 4 tha clubs)

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~Verse 1~
Im tha hottest boy/
Nyghtmare tha Hunger Chyld comin thru makin noise/
A-T-L-A-N-T-A/
Georgia is tha state where i stay/
Young and Dangerous/
Haters act like Kriss Kross cuz i make em jump/
Dressed in all black/
I carry a berretta that make everybody lean back/
Dont get it twisted, fam/
Cuz i'll drop u 2 tha ground havin tha whole crowd say GODAMN/
Im here 2 let u haters kno/
Body shots send ur whole crew into flipmode/

~Chorus~
U kno how we get crunk in tha club/
Atl holdin it down, showin tha whole world whatz up/
Im comin thru as tha young star of tha south/
Get buck if u wanna, then watch me spray rounds/

~Verse 2~
N-y-g-h-t-m-a-r-e/
Be tha name so all haters respect me/
Dont underestimate tha kid/
Im tha Hood Reaper so when u die its not grim/
Can't Stop, Won't Stop/
U don't need young gunz, u need a warrior that'll pop glocks/
Club Banger is what im called/
U steppin 2 me is like Bow Wow steppin 2 Roy Jones/
I dont have sympathy/
4 these fake rappers wantin 2 be like me/
Dont get nothin started/
Cuz 2 many head shots leave ya'll niggas retarded/

~Chorus 2x~
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Old 07-29-04, 04:22 PM   #2
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not greatly original I liked your first one better, your structure was all over the place although I was feelin the chorus you had here. the last line in the chorus could be upgraded though.

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Old 07-29-04, 04:26 PM   #3
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I knew it wasnt hotter than tha freestyle i posted but im work more harder and keep bein hungry and ready 4 war. Thankz 4 tha feedback kizz and like i told ruff tuff thug shout out 2 ur whole crew, ~much luv~
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Old 07-31-04, 04:29 AM   #4
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yo man you should check ma battle wit mc skiltz plz i need a vote
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Old 07-31-04, 07:22 AM   #5
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yo nytemare dis raw killa of B.A.M nice drop structure n flow could b worked on a lil but overall nice drop keep postin much luv holla back nigga
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Old 07-31-04, 10:06 AM   #6
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was aight, fl0ow was off.. as well as struvcture...
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