im jus anotha kid in denial frontin like my life is all good/
i got more problems in the suburbs...damn i wanna go back 2 da hood/
i dunno y the fuk we had 2 move all the bullshyt about danger/
now im suronded by drugs and my heart and minds filled wit anger/
and u cant trust none of theese kids..1 pinch and they'll snitch/
i feel backwards im sayin shyt like "i gotta scratch i cant itch"/
and now jus last week i find out 2 of my best friends been fukin/
they tell me afta 4 months and expect to be kool and act like its nuttin/
she said she didnt tell me cuz she didnt wanna "hurt my feelin"/
that stupid bitch gunna put me through years of internal healin/
a month before that my boy died in a crash because of plain misfortune/
so now i arive at his casket starin down at lifeless facial distortion/
i cant even measure in gallons all the pain and tears ive shed/
and i can feel my insides howlin cuz its like im internally dead/
and now im surronded by this bullshyt its all jus fillin my head/
it feels pretty good to get all this shyt off my chest/
cuz the next step was runnin wit a gun lots of bullets no vest/
and findin all thoose people who put me through this/
let the gun do the talkin and itll scream how the fuk could u do it/
cuz im fukin trapped i got no moves what the fuk am i supposed to do/
i hope all thoose motha fukers kno what they put me through/

what u think i need some feedback.................

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sorry 2 hear about dat papi....but I'm feelin it! It was good...tryin 2 figure out da flow though!

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My angel

"My heart my soul...my love my blood"

yea the flow was pretty wack on dis 1 but it was more just to get shyt off my chest and mind then it was 2 sound good thynx for the concern though much luv..........

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this was ok noting to great, but was good still non the less, u could of use a little multis or better vocab which im told to do all the time but one day i will try to but other then that this was preety good....

7.5 outta 10

thynx for the feedback need more uppin......................

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fuck what them haters say and that bitch with 100 posts and no battles .that was offical good flow and wordplay on it i liked it alot dogg.

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A.I

AIN'T THAT THE PURPOSE OF THE SITE?

thynx dog much luv 2 ya 4 that.............................

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i thought it was real sincere dawg thats what made it a good piece,i found it an easy read not packed fullof crap...nice job..srry bout ya boi 2 dawg i jus went through the same shit pretty much..it feels good jus ta get it off ya chest ,,,don't it??
hit this up for me if ya got time..
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i feel ya pain homie keep ya head up nigga n keep doin ya thing good drop holla back kid 1 luv peace out

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yo thynx for da love 2 from all yall much respect keep ya head up.........................

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its pretty tight i feel ur pain

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The kURSe Dont Rehearse

i was feelin where u was comein from i've been through some similar things. That was a bumpin ass verse

That was tight... sorry bout ur boy i think it had a pretty tight flow 2 it still

Can u give me some feedback on my shit

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