RapVerse.com Community
 Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End RV Radio  

Go Back   RapVerse.com Community > Fresh From The Lab > Textual Releases
User Name
Password
FAQ Calendar Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

Reply
 
Thread Tools Search this Thread Display Modes
Old 07-27-04, 01:43 AM   #1
raw killa
fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
 
raw killa's Avatar
 
Posts: 600
Joined: Jul 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 5-9
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
Post jus read it n give feedback no hatin

IP: B351 7371

ayt first of all if u catz really think i cant rhyme
than u muthafucka honestly lost yo mind
this aint da verse jus da intro
but seriously ya'll gotta b totally mental
when i drop sumtin give honest feedback not dickridaz on life support ok
oh let me put caps at da end of da words i have rhymin so u morons can actually see i can rhyme perfectly dumbasses ty

i c these cats is SLEEPIN,dats y i b CREEPIN,lay low n only drop writins on da WEEKEND,plz wut these text artist THINKIN,only flow they got is piss when they LEAKIN,u textcees jus HATIN,cuz im WRITINnrhymes like a rap TITAN//
niggaz cryin cuz i say nigga when i WRITE,say i cant rhyme when i RECITE,niggaz jus mad cuz my rhymes b TIGHT,instagatin beef on da net tryin 2 get in virtual FIGHT,cryin like babies cuz drop it LIKE,fire when i scorch da MIC,got shortie shakin they asses LIKE,sean pauls give me da LIGHT,walk by fish n think of manipulation n say hey shortie how u doin 2NITE//
then i got EYEDENTDY,who mistaken me 4 sum1 elses IDENTITY,let my compition study my 16 cuz i show'em PITY,put they time is cuz i run dis CITY(RB),niggaz comin wit ass cuz they rhymes is SHITTY,shootin out blanks cuz they nuts is EMPTY,n im SIMPLY 1 dat dont give a fuck TEMPT ME//
u act TOUGH,n ROUGH on da net but its ur only actin,n its obvious chips
n a sandwich is da only things u PACKIN,hatin me cuz i got wut they LACKIN,
SLACKIN hard when it comes 2 RAPPIN,bitch slapped? baby bottoms da only thing u SLAPPIN,calm da fuck down b4 ur peeps as wtf jus HAPPENED,niggaz
instagatin dis CAN,opener 2 get da CAN of whoopass CRACKIN,YAPPIN like faggots n whinnin like bitches so ya must like havin ur ass PACKED IN//
b CAUTIOUS,cuz my rhymes r sick makin u NAUTIOUS,so explizit ur parents refuse 2 WATCH THIS,im comin takin ya records n plaques n all ya shiny WATCHES,HOMOPHOBICS,turn into HETEROPHOBICS while ridin each others CROTCHES,punches so hard niggaz swear i wrote ROCKETS,i plug rhythm n flow into these lyrical SOCKETS,got yo fav MC'S,FEMCEE'S wantin 2 ROCK THIS,i keep comin wit truth n bearin facts while u continue2b MONOTANOUS//
these NIGGAZ,aint pullin TRIGGAZ,n countin FIGURES,n so wut if im jus anotha 1 of da WIGGAZ,at least act myself n all i c is a bunch of wanna b JIGGAZ,comin wit WEAPON'S,but my smith n WESSON'S BIGGA,BITCH NIGGAZ,NIGGAZ dat BITCH,SWITCH stories once this things off my HIP,wit desert eagles fully EUIPPED,wit infra-red beams n SHIT,wit HOLLOW TIPS,fillin my CLIPS,NIGGAZ get PISSED,when they peep da canaries on my WRIST//
so i cant RHYME,yet poetry seem 2 flow constant through these LINES,hatin cuz u neva seen a style like MINE,da TIME has come 4 me 2 SHINE,commitin a lyrical CRIME,MIND stuck in da race of TIME,da 1 puttin life in ya RHYMES//
i BLESS,my gun when eva it COUGH,n blow ya face OFF god BLESS,niggaz when i send them 2 REST,dis lyrical warfare n im da REFF,n each writin's a TEST,n give u niggaz an a for EFFORT,claimin thug but couldnt clear a pop CONCERT but non the LESS,u rappers buggin me like foreign PEST//
ur rhymes lackin like bread w/o da BUTTER,im grimmy n straight out da GUTTER,dis pistol loves poppin so i guess u can say it STUTTERS,smoke muffles all those words u MUTTER,dreams of drivin a HUMMER,u'll see im hot like da weather in da SUMMER,ya'll my prey n im ya HUNTER,dont hate cuz im raps next STUNNER,u didnt make dawg jeez dats a BUMMER,i got more loafs(stacks) of bread than WONDER,wit punchlines dat strick like THUNDER//
metophors dat cause rapper meno-PAUSE,put da track on PAUSE,when dis mic smacks ur JAWS,my words cut paper like hack SAWS,givin mic's a gift like i was santa CLAUS,im hot like tabasco SAUCE,leave ur death w/o a CAUSE//
im goin INSANE,these smileys 2 my right r laughin at me wuts wrong wit my BRAIN,is my mind playin tricks on me is dis GAME,n these voices i try 2 make'em out but they sound all da SAME,i guess i got my pops 2 BLAME,nigga so pussy he attacks handicap DAMES,dis rap was writin 2 prove i RHYME,FINE
when i rap 2 u LAMES,if i say nigga dont get mad its meanin friend in SLANG,pissed off bullets hit yo mug wit dead AIM,leavin holes i ya BRAIN like SPONGES,wit bass on my tracks dat bring doors off they HINDGES//
attackin da mic wit disorderly FITS,when it helled tight in my FIST,been here 2 weeks n already got a hit LIST,clowns cryin n throwin MISFITS,got PUNCHES,dat leave SCRATCHES on yo LIPS,yo rhymes r ill but not cuz they sick but cuz they growin CIST,i continue 2 rain on tracks cuz my words r MIST,all these fake thug speakin out they ass cuz all i hear is SHIT,all dis dick ridin n hatin is makin me PISSEDbut ima continue droppin these HITS//
fuck it if ya'll aint feelin ME,im a wigga so wut i say it WILLINGLY,n im continue 2 ACT,they way i do in life n when i RAP until my life lines go from
WIGGLY 2 STRAIGHT,until than i got 1 eye open til my dyin WAKE,cuz lotta rappers STRAY,like they thugs but really FAKES,i can see through da lines but all i see is SNAKES,get real u niggaz aint cookin coke ur bakin CAKES

sry yea i kno may sound a bit off but at least u fuckin morons who on here sayin i dont rhyme when i post my flows can see i rhyme perfectly fine peace out B.A.M. 4 life holla back rb honest feed back
__________________





VOTE IN THESE SLEPT ON BATTLES N ILL RETURN DA FAVOR WIT HONEST VOTES
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-27-04, 03:34 AM   #2
raw killa
fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
 
raw killa's Avatar
 
Posts: 600
Joined: Jul 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 5-9
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: B351 7371

ayt people i knos dis shit long as fuck but if u got time 2 read it u got time 2 drop um feedback give me wut u think honest opinion c'mon dont get typer's cramp now uppin
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^
thank you
__________________





VOTE IN THESE SLEPT ON BATTLES N ILL RETURN DA FAVOR WIT HONEST VOTES
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-27-04, 09:57 PM   #3
raw killa
fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
 
raw killa's Avatar
 
Posts: 600
Joined: Jul 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 5-9
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 53CB B4E1

ayt rb quit actin like da 50% of u dats stay on her for long periods of time durin da evenin n read people shit dat u aint got time 2 drop feedback y u people so fuckin lazy shit not on jus mine but otha pees verses n drops u fuckers act like u aint got da time of day 2 fuckin leavin ur opinion quit bein lazy n leave feed back peace out
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^uppin uppin uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
__________________





VOTE IN THESE SLEPT ON BATTLES N ILL RETURN DA FAVOR WIT HONEST VOTES
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-28-04, 04:22 AM   #4
Tha Unknown (Uk)
Welcome 2 Dope South
 
Tha Unknown (Uk)'s Avatar
 
Posts: 464
Joined: Jul 2004
From: Cashville,Ten-A-Key
Status: Offline
IP: C1DA C961

Yo dat shit was real cuz. So I ain't gonna knoc none of dat shit. Keep doin yo thing cuz
Send a message via Yahoo to Tha Unknown (Uk)   Reply With Quote
Old 07-28-04, 09:49 AM   #5
raw killa
fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
 
raw killa's Avatar
 
Posts: 600
Joined: Jul 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 5-9
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: B672 FAD2

ayt 17 peeps have viewed dis n only 1 besides myself uppin it has replied means dat bout 15 of u othas must b so fuckin busy in ur lives u cant drop a 3 sentence feedback jesus christ u people r damn lazy i swear drop suim fuckin feedback no hatin FEEDBACK shit act like it hurt u 2 leave a reply quit bein wimp n write i wanna kno wut u people honestly think n as i said no hatin or dick ridin pece uppin^^^^^^^^^^^^
__________________





VOTE IN THESE SLEPT ON BATTLES N ILL RETURN DA FAVOR WIT HONEST VOTES
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-29-04, 02:49 AM   #6
G_$peed
$Thug Life$
 
G_$peed's Avatar
 
Posts: 1,589
Joined: Jul 2004
From: The Hood
Status: Offline
IP: 646D CD48

yo this shit is tight man too long but i still like it
__________________
OutLawz

*(`'·.¸(`'·.¸**¸.·'´)¸.·'´)*
«´¨`·..* G_$peed *..·´¨`»
*(¸.·'´(¸.·'´**`'·.¸)`'·.¸)*
_____________________
Hot Songz
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-29-04, 02:53 AM   #7
raw killa
fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
 
raw killa's Avatar
 
Posts: 600
Joined: Jul 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 5-9
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 8493 686E

lmmao hince y i said long ass free write..i wrote since so many muthafuckas on here say i dont rhyme when i write so i wrote it wit all da rhyme words in caps...lol
__________________





VOTE IN THESE SLEPT ON BATTLES N ILL RETURN DA FAVOR WIT HONEST VOTES
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-29-04, 02:55 AM   #8
G_$peed
$Thug Life$
 
G_$peed's Avatar
 
Posts: 1,589
Joined: Jul 2004
From: The Hood
Status: Offline
IP: 646D CD48

aight who said that
__________________
OutLawz

*(`'·.¸(`'·.¸**¸.·'´)¸.·'´)*
«´¨`·..* G_$peed *..·´¨`»
*(¸.·'´(¸.·'´**`'·.¸)`'·.¸)*
_____________________
Hot Songz
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-29-04, 03:02 AM   #9
raw killa
fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
 
raw killa's Avatar
 
Posts: 600
Joined: Jul 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 5-9
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 8493 686E

buncha peeps...check out my battles (eyedentdy n my manipulation battle plus sum of my post on here in open mic people r blind or sumtin...lol
__________________





VOTE IN THESE SLEPT ON BATTLES N ILL RETURN DA FAVOR WIT HONEST VOTES
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-29-04, 06:42 AM   #10
Yvonne
...Closer Look...
 
Yvonne's Avatar
 
Posts: 2,015
Joined: Jun 2004
From: My crib
Status: Offline
IP: 90FE 55E6

it took me days to finish reading it...........but boo u know what i honestly think?....thats it was............................................... .................................................. .................................................. ........................................TIGHT!!!.. .lol...........yeah u ve ry good nothingelse to say..love ya
__________________
Hit This Up And I'll Hit Your's Too

Yvonne-Early In The Morning

S.K.M



Quote:
Originally Posted by B. Magik
Yvonne is dope

Quote:
Originally Posted by Terumoto
Word. I respect christians like you.

Now That's Wassup!
Send a message via AIM to Yvonne Send a message via MSN to Yvonne   Reply With Quote
Old 07-29-04, 06:47 AM   #11
raw killa
fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
 
raw killa's Avatar
 
Posts: 600
Joined: Jul 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 5-9
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 124C C0D5

thanx for da love from all luv ya 2 ma holla back mo feedback uppin c'mon people tell me wut u think damn
__________________





VOTE IN THESE SLEPT ON BATTLES N ILL RETURN DA FAVOR WIT HONEST VOTES
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-29-04, 07:45 AM   #12
MaNiPuLaTiOn
...tha princess of rv...
 
Posts: 639
Joined: Jul 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 1-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
Damn...re-structure.

IP: 6AD2 8F43

i c these cats is SLEEPIN,
dats y i b CREEPIN,
lay low n only drop writins on da WEEKEND,plz wut these text artist THINKIN
,only flow they got is piss when they LEAKIN
,u textcees jus HATIN
,cuz im WRITIN
niggaz cryin cuz i say nigga when i WRITE
,say i cant rhyme when i RECITE
,niggaz jus mad cuz my rhymes b TIGHT
,instagatin beef on da net tryin 2 get in virtual FIGHT
,cryin like babies cuz drop it LIKE
,fire when i scorch da MIC
C,got shortie shakin they asses LIKE
,sean pauls give me da LIGHT,walk by fish n think of manipulation n say hey shortie how u doin 2NITE


I AIGHT GONNA BOTHER WIT THE REST......^^^^^^^
u gotta make ur lines ryme at the end.not in the middle,
its called structure...fix it...
no hate..advice
__________________
.
MaNiPuLaTiOn
.
ToPiCaL GeNiUs

free agent
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-29-04, 07:50 AM   #13
raw killa
fuck da hataz B.A.M 4 life
 
raw killa's Avatar
 
Posts: 600
Joined: Jul 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 5-9
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 124C C0D5

if u look i do rhyme words in da end its my style dont hate it i mis punches,rhyme,multi's,metaphors,see i kno how 2 link my rhymes u kno i flow fast when i spit cant u undastand dat manipulation?
__________________





VOTE IN THESE SLEPT ON BATTLES N ILL RETURN DA FAVOR WIT HONEST VOTES
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-29-04, 07:57 AM   #14
MaNiPuLaTiOn
...tha princess of rv...
 
Posts: 639
Joined: Jul 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 1-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 6AD2 8F43

wen peeps read ur shit,they read it line by line.
so the way u structure it..makes it not rhyme
wen i read ur verse..it jus looks like multis...

if it was audio then it dnt matter..it wud rhyme
but this is txt...and it looks like it dnt rhyme.
fix ya structure,n u will get beta.
__________________
.
MaNiPuLaTiOn
.
ToPiCaL GeNiUs

free agent
  Reply With Quote
Old 07-29-04, 08:06 AM   #15
MaNiPuLaTiOn
...tha princess of rv...
 
Posts: 639
Joined: Jul 2004
Status: Offline
Text Record: 1-0
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 6AD2 8F43

r u peeps dat blind or jus dat lazy 2 read a whole rhyme?...i aint tryin 2 tlk shit but yo re-read my post but read da whole damn thing i kno u can do it it cant take dat much time outta ya busy scedule i rhyme every time wit words in da beginin,middle,n end
pm^from raw killa...


dawg..im not tryna beef,im tryna help.u aint listening,
rhymin words at the begining n middle r multies....
RHYME AT THE END OF UR LINES.....
IM NOT GONNA READ UR WHOLE VERSE COZ ITS THE SAME...
ITS NOT VERY ENTERTAINING TO READ 100 LINES OF WACK STRUCTURE...
FUKIN FIX IT...HOW HARD IS IT TO UNDERSTAND THAT?

UNTILL U DO ITS WACK.SIMPLE AS.
__________________
.
MaNiPuLaTiOn
.
ToPiCaL GeNiUs

free agent
  Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools Search this Thread
Search this Thread:

Advanced Search
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump



All times are GMT -4. The time now is 07:14 PM.

Powered by vBulletin.
Copyright © 2000-2004 Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.