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03-07-05, 06:22 PM
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My Baby's Daddy
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I dreamed black dreams the night we kissed
The memory of your lips lingers cold and crisp Dawdling flames that curdle my soul Banishing me to hell as we lost control Yet nothing could melt the ice you incased me with Twilight was captured within your eyes They led me nigh to where nightmares lie You kissed my lids and I was blind Darkness I feared (or was it the light?) Vaguely, I heard myself scream a thousand times You demolished my weakness with your touch My heart grew hard with the blackest love And then forgetting what it meant to care, I dropped my morals and left them there We devoured the stars, until darkness had overcome Featured poem for a week,great job~fluid
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03-07-05, 06:53 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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this is a nice drop ma u put a good lil twist on the whole concept of ur baby's daddy & had me ova here like damn i wonder who ur baby daddy is cuz dat'z 1 lucky nigga but neway nice vocab, structure was on point, & i like da metas overall i'll give this a 9.5/10 fo sho keep up the good work & r u spanish just wanted 2 know
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03-07-05, 07:42 PM
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No I'm not hispanic.
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03-10-05, 12:14 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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well miss lyricist can u return the favor 2 me in my new poem "Wanna Change My Life??"
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03-10-05, 03:37 AM
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I'm no vet!..just skilled
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yo this is realy dope.....it was good......i hope my girl feals that passionate about me.......
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