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Old 01-17-05, 02:45 AM   #1
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:Among The Stars:

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Emotions… contained,

until now…

---I remember when… I held you close to me---
…
Pictures lie across the floor, once embraced now discarded
Feelings uncontained, feelings so real the heart has departed
The abyss… it holds the only memories I had once controlled
Unexplained… reasons I cannot comprehend, am I so bold,
To ask the questions which have never been answered?
Is this my placement among the common mans standard?..
You glare at me, why do you hate?
Outside I see… inside I feel pain…
An array of words floating around in my mind, I cannot express.
All of them I do not understand I cannot grasp the dialect
Think of my emotions how love and hate collide
And all I feel is the hurt and the emptiness inside
I love you and I hate you, this is my story told
Under the pressure of emptiness, I begin to fold…

I had let you go among the stars,
And now…

You forever bore a constellation in my mind…

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Old 01-17-05, 09:27 PM   #2
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damn, dat was a pretty nice poem
keep it up
vocab was hot, so was the flow
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Old 01-20-05, 01:26 PM   #3
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Nice drop: emotion was very nice, flow n structure were tight. Had vocab on lock, good imagery, very vivid way to describe everything, easy to relate to topic to...

To ask the questions which have never been answered?
Is this my placement among the common mans standard?..
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Old 01-20-05, 04:44 PM   #4
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wow, this poem is dope, nice emotion and lyrical content too, your words are descriptive, you captured some great points in this,i wished there was more..lol,this was short,but excellent to read..stay up.1
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Old 01-22-05, 03:05 PM   #5
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thanx for the feed... much appreciated, will look for all of your peices for sure. Peace
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