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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=94150 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=94130 Mami no bullshyt holla at me! (Verse 1) The Story continues this time its chapter 2 keep ya eyez open mami cuz I'm after you take me serious instead of a laughter boo I kno my topics will keep ya entertained spittin what I learned I'm mentor trained my homies tellin me that you're gazing you must feel that J's style is blazing and you're whispering to your friend will J and you make a perfect blend? lets see and maybe try to be friends Holla at me ma, don't try to pretend I'm focusin on ya hips and my lines and them lucious lips fo some signs my romantic lines will make ya smile you're feelin me and my unique style roll wit me, go wit me, or we can take it slowly I'm sometimes ahead of myself, lemme rewind I apologize, I didn't mean to leave you behind if we eva were together I'd never cheat I'll never get smart wit chu I stay sweet a gentleman is wat I'm supposed to be I might be lunchin, buts thats really me my purpose is to bring you joy don't forget to holla at cha boi (hook)--->got lazy on da hook! roll wit me(x7) Holla at cha boi roll wit me(x3) Holla at cha boi (Verse 2) you said, you've been searchin for that special brother I've been searchin fo that misses, we found each other once I get that key, I'm a put tha game to sleep I rather have you bcuz tha street fame is cheap you sice me in front of your friends and I like that I've been pimpin since birth boo, I'll be right back niggaz say you control me, but you give me wat I want tha girl I'm with you call my gurlfriend, is really my aunt you kno I call you crash bandicoot, you call me ya Little Bill this gurl told me to express my feelings and tell ya how I feel 06 Bonnie & Clyde, everybody says we'll make a cute couple better keep those eyez of yours on watch, cuz I stay in trouble holla at me (hook) (Verse 3) I'm glad cuz the leisure is on and cuz tha pressure is gone we have different conversations and sometimes we silent if I front or do something wrong, you turn rough n violent you look even prettier when your mad mami I go crudy but still some way you stay by me and sometimes Jonny wants to know why B? in tha begining I was making bitch moves if I stayed in tha same ol position I'd lose and at tha same time these bammaz tried to holla you dropped them and now I got this silver dolla that Gangsta Luv from me, you'll soon receive it you're intelligent, nice, young and sexy believe it I'll support you, wateva your dream is achieve it come to me, all these other bammaz plz leave it all these muthafuckaz want it, but jonny needs it and you knew Jonny was really conceited way back my game was not once but twice defeated way back Holla at me, exchange digits don't call me ya bus buddy or you'll again witness tha side of Jonny thats real crudy I was once sweet towards you, but now I'm just funny when I ask for a dollar, you give me all of your money but again I'll come to you as sweet as "Winnie's honey" at first I was playn looney azz games like "bugs bunny" come roll wit me, go wit me, or we can take it slowly my purpose is to bring you joy don't forget to holla at cha boi |
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IP: 979B 9E0A
sleep!
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for ya first drop this was ok, the flow was knocked by the short lines, but if you expand the lines i think you got potential..but lose those kinda hooks..some ok vocab, but some just seemed like it was there to fill a gap...work on it....Pz.....
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IP: 0AE3 F3B7
thanx uppin
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Masquarading 4 U
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IP: 6F9E F23B
aiight attempt..........not bad for ya first time really.......try lengthenin ya bars tho.......n use some multi'z.....Then it'll be right as rain mate
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IP: 4F09 4395
ok thanx uppin
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YOU NEED WORK BUT YOU ARE NOT GARBAGE ELIVATE YOU WILL GET GOOD AT THIS
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IP: 2F38 CA70
ok uppin
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If you want to start elevatin from any place possible. I would start with Vocab, rhyme scheme, and line length. You have rhyme, you aint got no problems in the area. But you gatta combine everything in one whole, to creat somthing people like. Good drop though hommie, i know you can elevate. So I will be checking your future flows. Keep it up hommie.
OUT -High Class a.k.a Confusion
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IP: 2F38 CA70
iight thanx uppin
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Fuck Dog, I've Seen Worse First Drops, This One Won't Half Bad. You Definately Need To Work On Flow And Line Extension. The Short Lines Hurt This Piece In A Major Way. Vocab Can Be Upped If You Feel You Need To, It's Not Really Important However, Because It's All About What You're Trying To Get Across And Your Content. Keep Droppin And Elevate, You Mos Def Got Potential.
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IP: 2F38 CA70
thanx
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