Aight Point Blank Dis Situation I Hate
So Fuckin Suppresed I Can't Think
So Fuckin Depressed I Can't Bank
I'm Talkin No One Listens Cause
My Position Is That Of A Slave In
A Kitchen Lips Closed No Sound
Yellin In Da BackGround Ain't No
Way I Can Back Down Livin Da
Way I Do Bein Compared To Him,
Her,And You.... I'd Be A Fool Not To
Use This Tool Like It's Burnin Hot But
I Don't Jump Into The Pool Try To
Stay Legit But 9 to 5 Ain't Doin It
I Need To Make Dough, Stay Low,
Throw Away My Fuckin Halo Dat I
Never Had Always Bad Learn To Stay
Away Just Like My Fuckin Dad Rap Ain't A
Fad And I Ain't Goin Nowhere As Long
As I Got Dis Pen And Pad Write Till My
Last Breath On My Bed of Death
Remembered As Da Only Angel To
Hell And Back No Scars Not a Scratch
Some Bars And A Track Come Far But
Don't Go Back Would Be Pain No Sunshine
All Rain Not Brave All Fear But They'll
Remember Da Name In Pain

Love And Tears

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L-A-T

Take A Bath Wit Da Catholics In Holy Water No Wonder Dey Tryna Hold Me Under Longer
-Eminem "Renegade"

Dat Gurl Wit Da Vicious Flows And Tight Thighs
Niggas Wanna Sign Her And Make Her Dey Wife
-Love And Tears LAT

yo I'm feelin it cuz. jess work on da structure of your future raps. otherwise dats dat shit keep doin wah you do ~one~

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Fuk Tha Rules

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L-A-T

Take A Bath Wit Da Catholics In Holy Water No Wonder Dey Tryna Hold Me Under Longer
-Eminem "Renegade"

Dat Gurl Wit Da Vicious Flows And Tight Thighs
Niggas Wanna Sign Her And Make Her Dey Wife
-Love And Tears LAT

I liked it nice steady even flow, good wordplay. I thought it was well done. lines coulda been a bit longer to shorten up the verse but other than that it was good.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=138209

hit mine up, lemme know what u think.

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B.A.M.

Breathless Arresting Mindscapes

Kizza

Shy

Ruff-tuff-thug

Raw Killa

Cruelintentionz

Ill rhymes, keep tha flows comin and stay focused.

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[COLOR=DarkGreen]Tha 617 King

upppppppiiiiiiiiiiiinnnnnn ffffffffooooooorrrrr ffffeeeeddddd!!!!!!!!

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L-A-T

Take A Bath Wit Da Catholics In Holy Water No Wonder Dey Tryna Hold Me Under Longer
-Eminem "Renegade"

Dat Gurl Wit Da Vicious Flows And Tight Thighs
Niggas Wanna Sign Her And Make Her Dey Wife
-Love And Tears LAT

uppin plz

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L-A-T

Take A Bath Wit Da Catholics In Holy Water No Wonder Dey Tryna Hold Me Under Longer
-Eminem "Renegade"

Dat Gurl Wit Da Vicious Flows And Tight Thighs
Niggas Wanna Sign Her And Make Her Dey Wife
-Love And Tears LAT