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Old 08-02-04, 08:34 PM   #1
raw killa
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Post new shit uppin 4 feedback

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i submit subliminal messages through my cockyness,every time rounds shatter ur cartolidge's,lyrical punches collapse ur esophguase,gettin slapped wit 8 arms wit each 16 bars like i was half octopus,u niggaz dicks n nuts so small 2 see'em u need binoculars,my dick been i mo bitches mouths than canker sores

people say i self glorify myself actin like im better than dem,but i dont need 2 self glorify ya'll do it for me wit ya ignorance n arogance & then,niggaz get mad cuz my nigga rapes da paper when he fucks a pen,"oh he's white he cant say nigga he doesnt fit in",clouded by sin,countin my losses as blinded wins,cuz promise if i was 100% black u niggaz would b feelin me then

representin breathless aressting mindscapes,haunted by hates,surrounded by fakes,lets b honest half u fuckas,nuttin but straight suckas who couldnt sell a album if weed came inside wit they tapes,n they lyrics scream when attacked
n begin hollarin rape,cop ya cd's jus 2 use as paper weights

im not sayin im da greatest,or fuckin rap godest,im jus bein honest,my bad 4 bein a lil 2 modest,lotta rappers here act like they da hottest,but in my lyrics u see da startin flames like i set fires wit my rhymes cuz im a lyrical arcinist,rap has changed its different now n every 1 wanna b artist

i could give a shit if u respect my flow,u can love me our hate me but i gotta make dis doe,talkin like ya'll kno,but ya'll faggots will neva kno who da fuck i amso jus respect it hoes,b4 i make nets outta ya clothes,wit burn marks n blood stains clingin 2 da holes,niggaz like damn wut u gotta do dat 4

2 many screws in my head loose,dats why im crazy wit rhymes when up in da booth,speakin crazy but tellin da truth,,im sick of explain i got nuttin 2 prove,
jus like if i shoot myself 2marrow so i aint got nuttin 2 lose,so is life or death
decisions 2 difficult 2 choose,n i swallow,da sarrow wit a bottle of booze,
hop in my car wit da empty bottle n go 4 a cruise,crash n kill 2 innocent people now im left wit tickets n lawsuits n a horrible bruise,so which do u think dat i choose?
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Old 08-02-04, 08:40 PM   #2
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"people say i self glorify myself actin like im better than dem,but i dont need 2 self glorify ya'll do it for me wit ya ignorance n arogance & then,niggaz get mad cuz my nigga rapes da paper when he fucks a pen,"oh he's white he cant say nigga he doesnt fit in",clouded by sin,countin my losses as blinded wins,cuz promise if i was 100% black u niggaz would b feelin me then"


truer words are never spoken...nice drop dawg Im feelin it for real. check out my new open mic "Why Do I Do It"
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Old 08-02-04, 08:42 PM   #3
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ayt nigga thanx 4 da love
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Old 08-02-04, 08:56 PM   #4
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c'mon rv give me yo replies peep dis truth at work holla back uppin
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Old 08-02-04, 09:32 PM   #5
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i like it. i like ur style too:
"my nigga rapes da paper when he fucks a pen."
that was hot
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Old 08-02-04, 09:45 PM   #6
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thanx janedoe 4 da feedback c'mon people uppin dis shit 4 feedback^^^^^^^^^^^
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Old 08-02-04, 11:29 PM   #7
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all ya'll on rv need 2 seriously stop frontin n not jus read a thread but leave feed back 20 peeps viewed dis yet only 5 replies 2-3 from myself uppin u niggaz n niggets is lazy i swear i leave feedback in everything i look at n dats a lot of shit so return da favors
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Old 08-02-04, 11:34 PM   #8
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=139209
^^ feed back if u havent already....

but this was sick point blank the aggression was fire the lines was well put together, creative everyline was slick sorda a deep topic in a way but pure sick in my eyes...

hella drop kid....

9.8 outta 10 its fire.....
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Old 08-03-04, 03:53 AM   #9
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I liked it alot,,and you made some good points,,,the structure was nice as well
I give you a 7 out of 10....But it doesn't matter what I think,,Its what you think,,,but I do like it,,,God bless all...1

I NEED SOME FEED BACK PEOPLE.....http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=139368
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Old 08-03-04, 04:12 AM   #10
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rofl quit man i wasnt feelin it tha structure looked like u writen a fuckin book
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Old 08-04-04, 01:00 AM   #11
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i thought it was pretty decent...u made some true points..keep it up
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Old 08-04-04, 01:03 AM   #12
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Wasnt Feelin It Niether, And Why You Say Nigga So Much, I Dont Care, But It Just A Filler Word When Rapping And A Pointless One At That
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Old 08-04-04, 01:04 AM   #13
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ty 4 da feedback people except virtue nigga u jus mad i got skillz betta than u da rest of ya'll ty 4 da love ill return da favor holla back peace out 1 luv ya'll uppin 4 feedback
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Old 08-04-04, 04:34 AM   #14
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^^rofl ok lets battle then if u got so much skill fuckin homo u sad quit man
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Old 08-04-04, 04:59 AM   #15
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Originally Posted by raw killa
i submit subliminal messages through my cockyness,every time rounds shatter ur cartolidge's,lyrical punches collapse ur esophguase,gettin slapped wit 8 arms wit each 16 bars like i was half octopus,u niggaz dicks n nuts so small 2 see'em u need binoculars,my dick been i mo bitches mouths than canker sores
^^^this was aight i get your point"nice opener"

people say i self glorify myself actin like im better than dem,but i dont need 2 self glorify ya'll do it for me wit ya ignorance n arogance & then,niggaz get mad cuz my nigga rapes da paper when he fucks a pen,"oh he's white he cant say nigga he doesnt fit in",clouded by sin,countin my losses as blinded wins,cuz promise if i was 100% black u niggaz would b feelin me then
^^^this was straight dope

representin breathless aressting mindscapes,haunted by hates,surrounded by fakes,lets b honest half u fuckas,nuttin but straight suckas who couldnt sell a album if weed came inside wit they tapes,n they lyrics scream when attacked
n begin hollarin rape,cop ya cd's jus 2 use as paper weights
^^kinda played with the paper wieght line

im not sayin im da greatest,or fuckin rap godest,im jus bein honest,my bad 4 bein a lil 2 modest,lotta rappers here act like they da hottest,but in my lyrics u see da startin flames like i set fires wit my rhymes cuz im a lyrical arcinist,rap has changed its different now n every 1 wanna b artist
^^^this was tight,my favourite lines

i could give a shit if u respect my flow,u can love me our hate me but i gotta make dis doe,talkin like ya'll kno,but ya'll faggots will neva kno who da fuck i amso jus respect it hoes,b4 i make nets outta ya clothes,wit burn marks n blood stains clingin 2 da holes,niggaz like damn wut u gotta do dat 4
^^^^nice flow

2 many screws in my head loose,dats why im crazy wit rhymes when up in da booth,speakin crazy but tellin da truth,,im sick of explain i got nuttin 2 prove,
jus like if i shoot myself 2marrow so i aint got nuttin 2 lose,so is life or death
decisions 2 difficult 2 choose,n i swallow,da sarrow wit a bottle of booze,
hop in my car wit da empty bottle n go 4 a cruise,crash n kill 2 innocent people now im left wit tickets n lawsuits n a horrible bruise,so which do u think dat i choose?

^^koo closer

overall killa this was a good piece dawg i liked reading this..nice work..7.5/10
ya had some serious agenda n shit ta get off ya shoulders it seemed n i liked the way ya did it...don't sweat the haters dawg....

looking for feedback on this shit...
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http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=138359
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