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10-11-04, 04:10 PM
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atlas the vagabond
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inevitable(streets story unfinished)
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wrote this to this song, with T west and a bunch of cats, called the Killing process. Inspiration for this verse, the killing process
I apologize am ever I be sighted lying by the chrome// But truth in eyes, when they say i relied on i and i alone// lord bless the heart of men, that speak as if my life is thiers// let your eyes reside on those of mine like i alive was there// i was only a 9 to 5'in child survivin in a world// against I as I would try in time providing for my girl// still they hate me, even when they caught me in my weakness// broke my face in, yet in the face of loss, my traits remain elitest// their sentence is death now, I can see no other way// ski mask and leather gloves, with my nina tucked away// Sold my last two hundred pills, for double price and stocked my gun// with bullets enough, for an army's fall, to all be chopped at once// Blessed is her that bears my child, with knowledge of my fate// May she find a part of me, that breathes, that's in our infant's face// Vengeance killed me, my anger had me cookin in my hell// my children see my smile only when thier lookin at themselves// this is unfinished, but it is connected to my first open mic. in terms of story and all. read them both. Last edited by Maku JaiiLiin : 10-11-04 at 05:26 PM. |
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10-11-04, 05:10 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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wow, dope drop, read all together it flows well, and i liked your vocabulary and content, love this closer to this piece as well, great style and words.....awesome job...hit me up on a topic, i still want to collab.....1
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10-23-04, 03:15 PM
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atlas the vagabond
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uppin 4 votes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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10-23-04, 09:59 PM
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The Ups and Downs of Life
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IP:
this shit was pretty dope-- good start, nice flow, nice imagery-- i enjoyed it.
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10-23-04, 10:02 PM
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Middle Weight
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Flow was tight, structure was tight, vocab, imagery, all that was good. But what really stood out was the substance. Even without that, still levels above most. Keep it up.
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10-23-04, 10:47 PM
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New to RV
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gayest fucken shit i ever read
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10-30-04, 02:28 PM
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atlas the vagabond
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IP:
................uppin 4 feedback on this one......
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11-01-04, 04:12 PM
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atlas the vagabond
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IP:
upppin 4 feedback on this one ............. ..............
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12-06-04, 04:11 PM
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atlas the vagabond
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IP:
uppin 4 feedback
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