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11-05-04, 06:23 PM
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GoD LiKe
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The Break Up
IP:
My girl actually broke up wit me this week… I guess if the topic is words before you die… Ima die… PeeP…
Love… All I wanted to do… was surround you… simply…cover you… comfort you… cherish you… keep you near… forever… My heart… torn… raped… and discarded… My soul… tired… as if I am no longer willing to go on… My mind… confused… as if I do not except what has just happened… :: The unexpected has come to past :: Our love… is nothing more than a faint memory… What was once in my hands… has crumbled… I try to hold on… struggling to gripping tighter… but… the remaining ashes… seep through my hands… slowly… :: What… has forced you to no longer love me, care for me… like I did for you… :: I pray I am not at fault… I shall do anything to make us work… prosper… last… forever… :: I mourn :: I tell myself to move on… my feet… heavy… I have not the strength… to move… I ask why… :: silence… :: :: The signs… where clear… :: Miscommunication… Led to no communication… Hugless goodbye’s… Emotionless I love yous… You no longer look me in the face………… My world revolves around you…… Abandoned… Stranded… alone… coldness takes over… illumination is gone… darkness… I need you… your gone… I breath you… my air… gone… You feed my soul… your gone… I breath no more… touch no more… I feel no more… I hunger… I thrust…
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11-06-04, 06:10 AM
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Addicted
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IP:
nice poem i feel ya dogg...stay up dogg.......
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11-08-04, 03:03 AM
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Back In Business
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IP:
damn dawg!!!! poetry, too?!!! this was some really good shyt... especially with that free-verse style ya used in this drop. real emotional... deep... made a brother wunna snatch his shorty up and wisk her off to da poconos for da weekend just because...lol... for real tho, i liked this shyt a lot...9.5/10
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11-16-04, 01:51 AM
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IP:
Ice Pick, that poem was touchin'..
Love… All I wanted to do… was surround you… simply…cover you… comfort you… cherish you… keep you near… forever… My heart… torn… raped… and discarded… My soul… tired… as if I am no longer willing to go on… My mind… confused… as if I do not except what has just happened… :: The unexpected has come to past :: Our love… is nothing more than a faint memory… What was once in my hands… has crumbled… I try to hold on… struggling to gripping tighter… but… the remaining ashes… seep through my hands… slowly… :: What… has forced you to no longer love me, care for me… like I did for you… :: ^nice all nice... keep droppin' that nice stuff, Ice Pick..
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11-16-04, 02:10 AM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP:
You know, i've read all of your drops Ice Pick, but i must say, this was the most raw, full of emotions, and just dripping with every type of feeling, your words set the tone well here, and i liked the way you set this up, kind of like your love was rain drops, and they were falling away....thats how you wrote this...well, what i took from it...but so intense man, i always enjoy reading your pieces,and in time,your broken heart will mend........1
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11-22-04, 11:04 PM
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IP:
damn u ice pick, im jealous lol, you always seem to do better then me in poems, but wow man, i honestly call you the best poet in this site, better then poet n valor put together... 9.8/10
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11-24-04, 11:36 AM
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~Break Bred or Play Dead~
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IP:
nice poem kid
im feelin u on this subject
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