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05-29-05, 01:52 AM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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Memorial Weekend...please just look
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...Memorial Weekend...
A lot of shit happened happend this weekend...my grandfather died me and my girl broke up...thats 2 loves in 1 weekend...life will never be the same again... You know life is too precious to waste rapid to steady pastes,fixed wit hurt faces need inifite hearts to replace the ones that get broken you will never know ones love, if it remains unspoken Grandpa, damn im gonna really miss you you da only man i came too with my issues now you gone and your death has made me realize its ok too have a grown man cry neva know how much u miss em till dey go-n-die tho i cant be there my heart remains wit chu, make sense? that i got implanted memories, n gotta deal wit dis relentlessness Girl, Shit aint neva gonna be da same again you used to beg me just to say your name again you broke my heart, and now its like i cant love we was togetha, me n u girl no one else above broke my heart in 3 places, cuz thats how many chances i give just dont hold back, cuz we only got one live to live You know life is too precious to waste rapid to steady pastes,fixed wit hurt faces need inifite hearts to replace the ones that get broken you will never know ones love, if it remains unspoken In Loving Memory of Donzell Brown -Your Grandson Dino Brown II- |
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05-29-05, 02:00 AM
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"Fuck Wit Me, Then You Fuckin Wit Tha Best"
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Im really gonna miss you Grandpa.............good shit cuz....... -Your Grandson Rondell Brown
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06-04-05, 07:37 PM
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ready 4 wuteva
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huh? ya'll related???wow, i wouldda never guessed
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05-29-05, 02:35 AM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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05-29-05, 02:38 AM
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...OUTSTANDING...
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IP:
(Wow im impressed with your peice it strucked some nerves)
Your structure was decent and your vocab was well balence, so i say 7/10 based on words and strutcure. BUT. . . . . . . I give you a 9/10 for your creativeity.
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05-29-05, 02:41 AM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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IP:
creativity?????that peice wasnt made up or fake..that really happened..but if ur talkin bout creativity as in how i put everything together then thanks..i appreciate it very much means a lot.....
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05-29-05, 08:01 AM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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IP:
uppin..........
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05-29-05, 08:01 AM
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Odi et Amo
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IP:
Of course, the strongest aspect of this piece is the emotion, was so pure and serene. The chorus was very nice, that must be my favorite part of the piece because it sums it all up and is packed with emotion. It's good that you can write about it. Imagery was on point as well as flow, kept vocab simple which gave the piece a powerful yet serene vibe.
I'm sorry about your grandpa, may he rest in peace and may his spirit live on within your hearts. Sorry about ya girl too, maybe you can still work it out...
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05-29-05, 05:10 PM
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My Dick Stay Wet
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IP:
uppin..........
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05-29-05, 05:32 PM
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IP:
The emotion is strong in this thread my chryme. I commend you for spilling so honestly, i've done it and I wish others would more frequently. Keep it commin'. Peace.
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05-29-05, 05:40 PM
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Skadoosh!
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IP:
damn
losin family is hard man i remember when i lost my grandpa, shit was hard, i cried for dayz!!! i like the emotion of this piece, and yea, creativeness was pretty good the way you put everything together also sorry to hear about you and ya girl if you are referrin to who i think you are anyway guess my counselling didnt work!!!! overall 8/10
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05-30-05, 01:19 AM
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IP:
This was a pretty good drop , i was really feeling it ... Nice drop son , i feel you loosing family isnt easy....You had some nice structure,..pretty good wordplay, okay vocab thought it was simple, You had a nice concept and good imagery, very creative , nice shyt ...keep it up
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05-30-05, 01:32 AM
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IP:
yaeh this was a nice drop.. sorry bout ur grandpa and chur gurl.. u had alot of emotion and a good flow i liked this peice.. keep ya head up..
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