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05-08-03, 08:06 PM
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My Love
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Im gonna love you till the day I die/
Fucked up things happen, asking myself "why?"/ Makin love poems for you, never stop, keep on flowin/ Like an energizer battery i just keep goin and goin/ Our love will last until the end of tyme/ but our love is too strong to be explained in a rhyme/ Sometimes my worlds messed up, but ure smiling, always there/ To me ure not a friend, ure like a big huggable teddy bear/ and we have memeroies we can always share, i know its right/ I fell in love with you at first sight/ always wanna hold you tight/ and never let go/ never stop my flow/ so.....I LOVE YOU. Hey ya'll tell me waht ya think and also if ya can plz comment on "My theory on life". Thx peace out.  |
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05-08-03, 10:40 PM
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IP:
uppin for replies
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05-08-03, 10:48 PM
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IP:
zzzzz....*snore*...uppin people!
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05-08-03, 10:53 PM
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IP:
I liked it i think it could have been longer to show the real emotion....other then that it was good
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05-09-03, 12:00 PM
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thx evil, ya i coulda made it longer...i'll do that next time
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05-09-03, 12:01 PM
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IP:
uppin
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05-09-03, 10:57 PM
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IP:
grrrrrrrr.....
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05-10-03, 01:26 AM
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IP:
UPPIN!!!
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05-10-03, 09:43 AM
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IP:
is good...cept it would of been better if it was longer
is tite tho |
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05-10-03, 04:42 PM
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Tampons are expensive
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IP:
love is like the center of poetry..however u wanna do it..it would turn out completely fine but i agree that if u made it longer...it would be much better...
nice one! keep em droppin!
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<br><br><center>- Shiznit - - Tampons are still expensive - - That's a Fact - </center> |
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05-10-03, 08:49 PM
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IP:
Yea all that stuff they said but like shiznit said when its love it don't matter its always going to be good. And this was a cute peice no matter if it was short or not.
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05-10-03, 10:26 PM
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IP:
thx all be sure to check out my other poems
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05-10-03, 10:27 PM
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IP:
uppin for comments
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05-11-03, 11:39 AM
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..A New Breed of Femcee..
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IP:
This was OK..Simple in a lot of ways but good concept n message. I thought you could have ended it better, but overall was a sweet piece.
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05-11-03, 01:22 PM
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IP:
definatly could have been longer but good for what u did put down. to help wit writtin more u couldve elaborated more on exactly what u were talkin about and even who, that way u left it could have been a girl, hip hop, music, a gun anything, but stil not bad...
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