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08-04-04, 07:04 PM
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New to RV
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U think u kno?!
IP: F254 4043
Im a black man wit a purpose, not a dream or a goal
u think u kno how 2 raise a troubled 15 yr old ppl alwayz wonder what i can achieve in life u think u kno how 2 tell someone wrong from right raised in tha projects, a young nigga 2 some u think u kno what itz like 2 be a fatherless son tryin 2 find a positive road and never look back u think u kno what is fiction and what is fact dont get it twisted this life of mine i'll alwayz remember u think u kno what itz like 2 get no presents on december I kno what itz like cuz i use 2 live that life i dont have 2 fight anymore, i kno whatz right
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Last edited by Nyghtmare : 08-04-04 at 07:38 PM. |
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08-04-04, 07:09 PM
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$Thug Life$
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IP: 7C6F 690C
yo this was nice and deep but yo this is poems not rap change yo structure
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08-04-04, 07:37 PM
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IP: F254 4043
i'll keep that in mind next time. thanx
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[COLOR=DarkGreen]Tha 617 King
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08-04-04, 07:45 PM
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IP: CBB6 1016
short scheme
simple but it gets a point across use stronger words for shorter poems with less description like urs is but other than that thats pretty good...i liked it by tha way u should go return tha favor and drop somefeedback 4 my tow poems: "your pain is my pain" and "turn for tha worse" |
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