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11-05-04, 07:40 PM
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just a rapper
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Help
IP: 6618 2DB7
hey yo i dont wana admit it but i need some help with my rhymes. can someone help me with my rhymes? id really appreciate it. here is my worst battle...............
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=158965 holla someone. 
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11-05-04, 07:42 PM
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Flyweight
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IP: 33AE 4F40
PM me, dawg...
If you dont think i'm good enough to help, check my drops in the Open Mic and Cyphers..
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11-05-04, 07:44 PM
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#3
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G.Y.T.
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IP: 8491 1474
a battle against you im just not feeling it/
what kinda gay name is Logistic/ That barely rhymes come on dog now think/ what kinda of man puts his profile in pink/ Dat ain't a good punch so now i cant tell if your a boy or a girl/ your mother told me you were both which made me hurl/ Very sad punch this battle im taking it/ the only way you will win is if i get disqaulified for some shit/ Umm, still not good punch looking at your record of wins i see you only have one/ nigga turning paler than Michael Jackson/ Look at your own record.. basiclly..think of better punches, vocab, n structure... -Dabatos
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11-05-04, 07:48 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
the whole verse was off keep trying..
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11-05-04, 07:51 PM
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Black Poet
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IP: 07E0 A9F2
Sup keep writing it will come.
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11-05-04, 07:53 PM
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G.Y.T.
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IP: 8491 1474
everyone gets better at a point.. n i gotta admitt. i was like dat before also.. and so has everyone else!! if they say they wern't then they are liars!
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11-05-04, 07:53 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: BE74 FCEB
yea, dude practise and u will get better... make freinds with a dictionary...
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11-05-04, 07:55 PM
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G.Y.T.
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IP: 8491 1474
dats fucked up lol!
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11-05-04, 07:59 PM
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IP: 23CC 11AC
Just keep practicin kid ... Listen to some rap (that works)
Get a rhyme scheme ... Think of new punches/original ... It'll come ... But until then ... you suck . . . . . .  |
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11-05-04, 08:05 PM
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#10
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Flyweight
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IP: 33AE 4F40
^LMAO...
damn... Critisim can be an artist's best friend or his downfall... From the looks of things...you fallin...
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..-Da R.I.P.-.. "..I'ma R.I.P.pa', remember.." --Darkness Shines Bright-- |-([..Let The Records Show..])-| Body Count: 91 Kills Survivors: 16 Injured Still Lost In Battle: 70 Knock Outs In My Scope: -- |
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11-05-04, 08:27 PM
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just a rapper
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IP: 108E 5648
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http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=158962
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11-05-04, 08:35 PM
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just a rapper
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IP: 108E 5648
im only 14 people. lay off........................
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11-05-04, 08:38 PM
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Flyweight
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IP: 33AE 4F40
^age aint a reason...
I could understand if you were like..7-8...but you're 14.. How old were you when you first heard rap, and then TRIED to rap?
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..-Da R.I.P.-.. "..I'ma R.I.P.pa', remember.." --Darkness Shines Bright-- |-([..Let The Records Show..])-| Body Count: 91 Kills Survivors: 16 Injured Still Lost In Battle: 70 Knock Outs In My Scope: -- |
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11-05-04, 08:43 PM
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IP: C4A3 993F
rofl@his first post....classic.
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11-05-04, 08:57 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
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so age who gives a fuck im 14..lots of us are.. |
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