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what you gonna do?
IP: AA7A 7677
I am so damn unstable from this life if I die i wouldn't wanna live on earth twice people don't realize how much ive been torchered ive been through it all and still got more in order trying to get myself back and stand up and face but eventually realitys gonna put you in ya place so stand back cause im just about to break when im sleeping I wish i couldn't even wake all these haters jumping at me like little snakes makin my mind crack so im tempting your fate step back in line im about to lose my mind and theres no signs i'll show remorse for ur kind thinkin about my mistakes gettin back on my feet your bitter words now don't have effect on me so try again yes ive got the creative best side that'll take differen't places so come and ride I don't even know why im here im not human don't like what i say you can try sue then sick of other rappers trying to give me critics when half of you can't even think of decent lyrics so put my tape on the set listen to me for a sec and watch me make money faster than a check put my music on ya decks make room for effect leaving you nobodys follow behind in reject life will kick you in ass so you best run fast people don't want you they just want ya cash I had to learn from my mistakes now im back ready to blow you away with such powerful rap you an't gonna bring no hate you an't got no time for a debate I don't wanna have to hate but if you keep this going im gonna break! Break!!!!!! repeat 3 times Last edited by Effect : 03-10-05 at 02:08 PM. |
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IP: CBD1 4982
nice piece here man good rhymes almost perfect flow a lil breaks in there but stayed on topic all the way through good structre ya got some sick shit man
please return the favor in my open mic "BITTERPHOBIA" links in my sig
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Geaux Fuck Yourself
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IP: 9A07 1297
6/10 you could really work on alot of things here...
And you know what you do bad and what you do good so I'm not going to sit here and preach to you. Anyways... return the feedback on my open mic "you don't know me"
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Geaux Fuck Yourself
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IP: 9A07 1297
like multi sylabol rhymes... really poor job at the end of your lines using this technique.
Very amature usage of multis and played metaphors... You wanted to know what you did wrong now there it is. I'm not jealous... I figured since you've been here a while you knew what you did wrong. However you did a GOOD job of showing emotion... which is cool. If you could leave some feedback on my open mic "you don't know me" I'd appreciate it.
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..::shut the fuck up::..
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IP: AA7A 7677
ok then i thought u were hating it's kool i'll try and improve in what you say but did I have tight lyrics if i get better i'll be able to improve alot...
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IP: CDAA 2D0A
that was garbage........
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Hell yeah
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IP: 3D49 422E
notbad man,not bad at all.7/10, i liked it,nice structure,nice flow,nice vocab,nice everything but not enought to have a 10...good drop man
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The story goes. Bill, B.
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IP: 606D F99A
it was a good drop, could be better but i liked it lol...nice flow and structure, vocab was cool....8/10...RTF at "T.E.L.N.O." or "Blah Blah"...or both lol
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IP: 0DD2 7DAA
yh it was good but it couldav been better... personally i liked it.... try to use multies in it... but u stayed to your stroy and it was good... keep it up 7/10
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