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Old 05-31-05, 11:42 PM   #1
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What animal might I be?

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Tree Limbs Sway Green & Gray as I Watch my Pray Twice Past
Tall Grass Almost Conceals the Figurative Wheels of Life’s Drag
Slipped but not Snagged I Tend to Wait for Just the Right Pause
I Ignore the Flaws Entangled in Natures Wind Breeze, I Sneeze
as I Once Again Dwell on Plots of Tangled Thoughts & Hunger
Engraved Within me Since Heaven Cast me Out on Chords of Thunder
On the Prowl, I Secretly Sneak my Way Forward Toward Horror
Not for me of Course, but This Being Awaiting my Gentle Torture
Entranced in Death's Dance I Write the Sequence as the Music Plays
So I confuse its Ways as the Illusive Plague Prepares to Invade
So Unaware and Unafraid as I Strive to Hide my Need to Strike
The Toon Plays on so I Finish my Solo Parade and Strive to Bite
Like Railroad Spikes I Pearce Flesh Wrapped on Chest Bone Cavity
Almost Savagely I Prolong this Blissful Tragedy I Chose to Indulge
I Smile as Eyes Flutter Innocence Away as she Begins to Convulse
Pretend to Engulf Acceptance an' Answer Questions .. Not for me..
So I Slither back Beneath the Green & Gray Canopy that Feeds me
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Old 06-01-05, 04:32 AM   #2
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if your asking what kind of animal you are portraying than I'd say a snake. Nice drop. I don't know if you wanted this to mean something but t was a very good drop. Too bad I knew it....
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Old 06-01-05, 05:31 PM   #3
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Thanks for the feed, Haha.
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Old 06-02-05, 09:30 AM   #4
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Old 06-02-05, 07:55 PM   #5
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Old 06-03-05, 02:15 PM   #6
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Very Nice Fams...
Only Thing To Be Carefull About Is Your Content...
Like The First Line What Kinda Iffy...
Looked Like You Just Wanted A Nice Flow...
Wich Was Accomplished But The Content Was Sort Of A Stretch...
But Very Nice Imagery And Metaphorical Speach...
Very Nice, Glad Have You With Us Over On C.S. Fams...
Stay Up And Keep Writing...
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Old 06-05-05, 11:14 PM   #7
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Old 06-13-05, 10:28 PM   #8
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Old 06-13-05, 10:53 PM   #9
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nice shit...rhymes were pretty good the flow was good the content was something new it was weird but it was good...id go with ur a lizard...very creative piece here...

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Old 06-14-05, 08:10 AM   #10
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id say this was a great drop

great use of vocab, portrayed a vivid story, and effective multies which gave it nice flow and a good read; and the vocab you used really brought out the story, good choice of descriptive words, which really painted a vile picture of this creature, nah sayin? and the emotion was pretty good too....if i may say so....haha....overall, great drop, yeah, some lines did seem a little fillerish, but oh well, still fit the context and worked out to be a good one

rtf on the one in my sig , keep up
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Old 06-15-05, 07:32 PM   #11
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Thanks for the feed you two, I checked out your drops.

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Old 06-15-05, 07:53 PM   #12
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very nice drop mayne, excellent vocab......nice structure good word play....nice rhyme complextion multi's nothen to bragg about.....u have good imagery and very very nice description of wut u are trying to describe........8/10........RTF...on my mike jackson diss....thanks
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