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Old 10-24-05, 12:00 PM   #1
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2nd audio.

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I worte and finished this in 10-15 minutes as soon as I got a free house,

tryed to up my pressence and flow a bit,

leave some feed plese.

Will rtf...

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Old 10-24-05, 12:05 PM   #2
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Old 10-24-05, 02:44 PM   #3
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Peepin it now..im feelin the beat...straight old school....lyrics is quite good...however ure emotion is not there...flow is meh...on and off..quality is ok compared to some niggas here...quite short...keep it up..gd for ya 2nd
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Old 10-24-05, 03:37 PM   #4
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DOnt Like The Beat Serious The Flow Is Better Than Ya Last Like Inter Said Put More Emotion In Ya Track's Ya Delivery Is Not Good Really Sorry Erm.Seem's Like You Intimidated Or Sumat Your Voice Is Very Monotonal But..Nevertheless You Improving Keep Up

Rtf On My I Am Real Track Plz
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Old 10-24-05, 03:38 PM   #5
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I'm not a fan of them uk accents some people have better voices from the uk but no hate or anythign but I don't like yours one bit, it's just annoying. Your flow needs a bit of work and as does your quality. lyrics are alright but I could give a damn about your lyrics because I was just try to figure out what you did wrong and that was basically the whole track. anyway it needs work man but overall you can still be somin don't listen to what I say.

rtf in my Natural Killa diss.

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Old 10-24-05, 03:44 PM   #6
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beat struck me as 90s immediately


not really feelin it...not a bad beat, jus don't see how it connects with ur lyrics/flow

ur vocals are hollow sounded, like they're mixed in a tunnel

ur flow is decent at best...kinda jerky

smooth it out


lyrics lackluster at best

u had a couple spots where the rhyme was pretty aiight...but nothing was too consistent


5.5/10 track

Elevate dawg


RTF pelase

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Old 10-24-05, 03:46 PM   #7
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il rtf on em all,

thanks for feed...

and q whats your msn?
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Old 10-24-05, 03:51 PM   #8
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il rtf on em all,

thanks for feed...

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Old 10-24-05, 04:45 PM   #9
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im surprised that this has got quite alot of hate, cuz i thought this was pretty hot to be honest. ok, there was a few things wrong with it, like the quality cud be improved, and the flow went off a couple of times, but it was still decent. you flow sounded kinda similiar to Jehst, dunno if you've hurd any of his stuff or not. it kinda sounded like a freestyle to me, i dunno if it was or not lol, if it was it's pretty decent for a freestyle lol.

overall, need a bit of elevation wit audio, but i thought this was pretty decent for your 2nd soundclick track. 7/10
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Old 10-25-05, 06:38 AM   #10
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beat is kool... your emotion aint there yet... sounds like your holing back still... lyrics are kool, flow is off in some points. overall its still a bad track but with time you'll elevate. gt at me boyut a collab... not a bad try though keep at it man
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Old 10-25-05, 11:23 AM   #11
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listening...beats nice...gimmie it lol...kick in well...rhymes are aight...flows ok could be better though you at times don't stay in tempo but finish in time...work on that...rhymes again are good...um...emotion is under par...but the more you spit the more you'll shake that off...it's a definite improvment from your 1st drop...vocally get a broader style...but you've improved from ya 1st drop but still not ready to beat me har har har lol...but ye....keep droppin
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