Vocab - pretty good, could have use a lil more
Rhyme Scheme - I was feeling the rhyme scheme
Synonyms - Did a pretty good job, remember, these are good for love raps...
Allusions - Allusions wher nice
Multies - I was feeling the multies
Topic - I Like these type of topics alot, cause I can relate to them
Neatness - Very neat, Got mad props on that on
UNderstanding - I understood everything, was feeling it, great work...
Flow - It flowed fluently the whole time, good job on that
Chorus- I was Loven the chorus, very nice rhyme scheme on that, good way to start this piece off..
Rate - 8.5 / 10

My thought - I was really feeling this hommies. You both did a very good job at constructing this collab. Also, the times im going through right now with me and my girl. I can relate to some of this alot. I was feeling it, keep this up playa's.

OUT

-High Class a.k.a Confusion

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Ok thanks.....up

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1940 - 2002

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i agree with most...this was a nice collab....both came good......the verses complimented eachother nicely......i agree what the hook was a bit long ...but other than that tight.....look forward to seeing another..........pZ.....

nice drop
straight shit from you both
kinda fell that the chorus wasn't really workin on this but no hate... nice drop anywayz.
8.5/10
probs to ya both
resp

both y'all peeps dropped nicely ont his one, and i think pretty soon that one of you could be droppin something that is good nough to get into RB legends, but cos of all the D/R that used to go on before the new admins came y'all got a better chance that ever.

in this peace eveything was on point, ou didnt stry off topic, and y'all came with some nice wordplay and immagery.

aiight

peace

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Word Up, This Is The Most Feedback I've Gotten For A Piece. . And It's A Collab. Real Glad Ya'll Feelin This. . LM N Me Might Hafta Drop Another One.

-Formula.

Yeah, after I've dropped my next solo tho....It's gon be hot and it's gon be called 'love you,hate you' and be bout the same girl as in this peice.....so keep an eye out for that, I've been workin on it all day and only just came up with a chorus I'm happy with.

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1940 - 2002

In Respect

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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002

In Respect

up

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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002

In Respect

up

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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002

In Respect

up

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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002

In Respect

up

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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002

In Respect

hot piece.... LM flows really good and has decent lyrics... formula can flip some great multis, and both of you had good vocab... keep it up, u two make a great team....

ps. the idea was very original and interesting... keep it up

9/10

Another 9/10.....Thanks.
I'm startin to think this is one of the best I've seen

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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002

In Respect