this is sumtin quick tell me wat i need to work on

i been in this game for couple of years
but still workin on makin music to people ears
think u been iin more hard times than me try to fight these tears
wen i got shot wit those nine's i though i was at peace
but i neva gave up on rappin i always had a caprice
i always feared the least but still had respect for homie's
had no respect for snitches i would aim my nine and squeeze
then a deal went bad kid didnt have the money and i was mad
so i said ill take everything valuable away from u even ur mom and Dad
So the kid got the money and paid me back
but he heard his mom and dad was dead and he died of a fatal anxiety attack

sometin quick and first open mic so help me out

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