Chances are you know who this is about...

Being with you is not equal opportunity
What you did to me, allowing this unity
Our courting was witness by this community
Why am I full of sorrow? Is it cause No Tomorrow
Influences my actions, I wish I could borrow
The strength you have, or are you also in denial
Matter of the heart, tribulations and trials
Best to stay apart, or be charged as a juvenile
Writing what I cant express with my voice
Short. Sweet. To the point.
You, Me, You make the choice!

Very short... as intended...
Almost would have liked to seen a couple of internals here.
Overall a strong piece but could have been expanded (I know it wasnt meant to be however)

Nice as always...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=106765
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If you get bored

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Nice Peice, Did Not Really Catch The Emotions Tho. Nice.

Well...you did a good job fitting big thoughts into a small space
I like the last line, it says alot......

Problem is though, it's to short, you can't express any complex thoughts or emotions...
But like ^^^ they said, I don't think it was intended...

I like the read

Follow my sig if you your feeling nice

Best to stay apart, or be charged as a juvenile
^ fuck that part lol

I kinda didnt understand it at 1st and I had to think when I read..
but yea ur poem was actually deep.. and I understand it now...
all I gotta say is much respekt.. luv yo gurlie Dimez...
Keep up the open micz

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Nice, piece it was short and sweet.. not much complexity.. and a little emotion.. but it was nice

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short... real short...

neways nice drop... i dont understand the topic cause i dont know you... easy as that... but you expressed alot through this peice...

fav lines:

Writing what I cant express with my voice
Short. Sweet. To the point.
You, Me, You make the choice!

^ interesting... neways keep droppin str8 heat...

Peace...

up!

I know you can do better...

It was alright, simplistic rhyme scheme. Had good use of the vocab though, cause the verse was so short. The structure was clean, but how hard is it to keep it clean when its that small. LOL . I liked how you used the topic name IN the flow. So that was pretty good. Alright drop hommie...

( PLEASE RETURN THE FAVOR AND PEEP THE OPEN MIC FLOW IN MY SIG, APPRICIATED )

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we all know realist could do better but obviously he juss wanted to keep this simple. but yea at least the name of this pieve ain't misleading. simple and short. was good I guess but I've definetly seen better stuff from u but anyways man keep droppin. peace.

hey if u get the chance peep mine and yaz's collab called "Stories of Old ft. Yaz" and leave some feedback plz. muchly appreciated and thanx in advance.

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