Yeah i agree this was a good piece here....enjoyed the read....you got the message across nicely i thought in this....had a nice solid structure....you had some nice multies through out the piece as well....the flow in this i thought was good, it flowed pretty smooth...vocab in this was good....content overall was good also i thought....made a good read...keep at it.

yea i think this was a real nice piece man really nicely done...ya flow was to a good extent..ya had nice structure...and ya had nice vocab and was really unexpected...So all and all this was a really nice Verse man Keep it droping...PeacE...

Real Nice Piece. . Legends ? Not Quite. . But Everything Was There And Prevalent. . Flow, Multi's. . Highly Dope. . Flow Made This An Easy Read. . That's Extra Points In My Book. . Structure Was Just Fine. . Vocab Was Good. . Everything Just Gelled In This Piece. . Great Job Cuz.

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thought this was a pretty straight read, apart form the layout, centering it,.... liked the way you carried ya rhyming, really got the flow going... apart from one bit in the middle...

If you know the car will reck, then keep the seat belt fascend//
There are many intentions, but were ordering wrong missions//

^^if this was fixed, it would have been bout 9/10.... cos the structure, vocab n shit was on point... and the concept was good, thought you could have closed it a bit stronger tho, but it was still done decent.... and the word play was there...so... as it is ill give it 7.5/10......

like mos def...tight vocab..very descriptive...nice topic also..flow was there...could have added couple of multis here and there but even without much still nice...

pce

some deep shit man. u stayed on point and your flow was tight very well structured rhyme scheme here as well, some decent wordplay and good use of vocab and some nice multi's made this piece stand out even more and your closing line was a nice way to finish it off. good job man keep droppin. peace.

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Not legends material but still ill. LoL, i wonder if you listen to a lot of Nas songs? seems like your piece is just like his songs. You had great flow, that really made a it a strong piece, and your rhyming scheme was...beautiful is the first word dat comes to mind lol. Message across very clear, espically the beginning, the beginning was dope.

Good drop overall. This is the shit you should post everytime. How long dd it take for you to do this by the way?

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