^Stan - by Eminem..

now that that little mistake is cleared up...yeah, this was one long ass dope piece...the emotion stood out the most here..real deep shit..sometimes people have nobody to discuss their problems with, so thats what they do, they write it down..for some people it helps..my emotional distress i think comes out in my rhymes and poetry, you learn to channel your feelings and put your heartache to good use..and thats exactly what you have done in this drop.. Your first verse was amazing..i loved it..

just one question, that line ; This woman is a fantasy to me...

aaagh you shouldn't have

LMAO

Keep droppin homie!

..thanks..you know I'll..

This is GOOD. Its the first ive heard from you but i like it. It drags a bit later on in the first but picks up in the second. It feels real and thats the best compliment i can pay!!!

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Downright fuckin raw...put a beat to this shit and itd be excellent...consistent flow, good structure good topic cool idea with the whole journal thing...lacking in vocab at times but what you had you used very nicely, subject that alot of people can relate to, no doubt...overall this deserves at least an 8/10

1 word ............quality

remind me never to battle u

I feel like uppin it...

quite ill son....U do audio?....If so, get this on audio and pm me the link cos it'll be ill..
Where U from...US or UK????????????

Donnit matter...ill stuff, wordplay ill, concept original as Fuck...
Flow was flawless....

9/10 for this piece

this is like da best open mic i've seen so far, it was great, it had alot of emotion.