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Old 02-09-04, 09:50 PM   #1
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Poetry...Or So it Seems

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Poetry...Or So it Seems
By: Curtis Desaulniers, 2003

Sometimes I wonder, what the future holds for me
I wonder, I wonder, so I write this poetry
I’m deep with devotion, I expose my emotion
I use words to express, nothing more, nothing less
When everything’s too much, I resort to a pad and pen
I know it happened once, and it might happen again
It seems I have a skill, a skill of weaving words
I hope I can inspire, like a friend that’s breathing courage
For this I write, for you I write, most of all I write for me
I write for right, I write for wrong, I write for what I see
I write for love, I write for hate, sometimes I write to write
I don’t know how, I don’t know why, words are my guiding light
There are so many combinations, that I could go on and on
But I’ll stop and let you talk, this is my phenomenon
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Old 02-09-04, 10:59 PM   #2
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Hell yea the topic everyone thinks about, but never says has finally come out. Nice stuff.

1st of all the topic is perfect. Why do we write poetry? Nice stuff, the expression was good, structure, feeling, it was all there. Nice work keep it up.

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Old 02-10-04, 07:47 AM   #3
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An alright poem, I wrote one very similar to this one. This piece(very much like my own) had no emotion. It was basically a very well written piece to explain how you feel about poetry. The vocab was a little higher than usual, but for this type of poem it should have been more complex. The rhyme scheme was good, strong for most of the parts, but fell off a couple of times. Not much emotion, but still very good poem. I think the poem should have been longer to make the reader get more feeling out of the piece. aight.

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