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02-06-04, 04:19 PM
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When Things Happen
IP: 4577 CD9A
You will never know what you once were to me I saw you as my savior, I though you set me free But now we're through So I'll do what I must do It's my time to hurt, to let tears heal my soul Release all my pain and let it takes its toll Men come and go and they always will But your imprint was large and is with me still Nothing has killed me yet, I'm stronger every day I will never let you smother me in every single way Now I'm going to breathe, I walk by myself No more will my heart be upon your empty shelf No more will I let you put me down I will never again let you throw me around Love is so blind everyone told me so All that time wasted with nothing to show Now that I move on I can change it all Wiser from the past, I will stand tall
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02-06-04, 10:29 PM
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IP: C1DA C961
whats a matter no one got nothing to say lol... peace
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<BR><h3><color=black><center><MARQUEE BEHAVIOR=scroll DIRECTION=left LOOP=infinite scrollamount=1 width=300>*~*~*Lady Wun*~*~*</MARQUEE></color></center></h3> <BR> <BR><MARQUEE BEHAVIOR=scroll DIRECTION=up LOOP=infinite scrollamount=1 height=100> <center><font color=000000><I>*~*~*~*~*</p>I'm invisible to the unseen eye</p>I'm undeniable strength</p>*~*~*~*~*~*</p>Merk Squad</MARQUEE></center><I> |
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02-07-04, 02:37 PM
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IP: 399E F0FD
this peice is reel gud, i think its reel and tru. the fact that it just stands out in a girls mind just gives way to imagery from past relationships. this is reel nice keep droppin
............fav peices............. Love is so blind everyone told me so All that time wasted with nothing to show Now that I move on I can change it all Wiser from the past, I will stand tall
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JUST TRY AND STOP ME !! ........Shangri La........ |
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02-08-04, 04:15 PM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
thanx
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<BR><h3><color=black><center><MARQUEE BEHAVIOR=scroll DIRECTION=left LOOP=infinite scrollamount=1 width=300>*~*~*Lady Wun*~*~*</MARQUEE></color></center></h3> <BR> <BR><MARQUEE BEHAVIOR=scroll DIRECTION=up LOOP=infinite scrollamount=1 height=100> <center><font color=000000><I>*~*~*~*~*</p>I'm invisible to the unseen eye</p>I'm undeniable strength</p>*~*~*~*~*~*</p>Merk Squad</MARQUEE></center><I> |
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02-10-04, 12:53 PM
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Sharp Perfection.
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IP: 4427 B15C
ok this is a topic that gets done over and over again, and most of the time, they are all about the same. and even thou you used some phrases in your piece that you see alot, you still put in some unique stuff, and made it fairly interesting.emotion was strong, but could use alot more detail when trying to describe us something, use all your senses.structure and rhyme scheme were basic, but rhyming didnt come off forced, did over do it. vocab was simple, can always up that some. it was a nice read.
~Tera~ DONT HATE
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