potent: your opener was barely damaging,plus your structure was off, you need to pick a sylable count and stick with it...your punches were ayite, half were played and the other half were minimal at best, you need to be more creative with your punchlines..you had one metaphor I think..but If I cant remember if you had one or not, it probably wasnt very memorable....there wasnt any wordplay...your closer started out really simple, dont use KO and fo sho ever again..that is just amature.. overall you did ayite, you need to build up your vocabulary..and just keep battling..


rappin' master: your opener flowed well, but made no sense to me..your structure was decent..I don't think there was a line that went too long....your punches were accually pretty good ,I especially likes the golf club punch...you also had a metaphor or two..good job on that...multiples were good also...your closer was structured really good, plus the heart punch was cleverly put...overall you came a lot harder with your punches..there weren't any personals from either one so that wasn't a factor here..

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