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02-15-04, 05:27 AM | #1 | ||
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Yo, I'm still pretty new 'round here, tried using more metas and shit in this one, don't know if thats good, I know you're gonna say elevate, and I'm tryin, so dont say that, just look at the piece then tell me some advice on what I need to improve, I tried to compare a battle to a regular nintendo controller in the last line, don't know how that worked out, give me some feedback, itd be greatly appreciated, thanks
This guy here battles with a dictionary in hand Claimin’ he elevatin, but he can barely enhance Like using a penis enlarger outside of your pants Outside of France he’s not brave he’s a coward Thinking that fast is zero miles an hour Style devoured, like Shaq dressing in tights This guy pees his pants, instead of gettin’ in fights Accepting your rights, and you just got bitch slapped I got you more scared, then the nights you were kidnapped I meant that, Jack, I’ll put you back in your spittin’ box Oh shit those are pimples? Man, I thought they were chicken pox Hittin’ blocks (blacks), not racistly man, I’m just playin’ craps What you tryin’ to say that he freestyles? I just say he raps Statin’ the facts, that he’s almost always spittin’ a written Like claimin’ you muff dived, after you’d bitten a kitten Shit in the kitchen, yea man, you’re always ass backwards You in a league of your own, (with all them other whack rappers) Hat backwards, I should just call you fuckin’ Rosie O‘Donnell Cuz the only thing out of the park is you and your Ladybugs at Mcdonald’s Mano-a-mano, man its just you and me, and a friend over your shoulder Up, down, left, right, start to select, its just A or B, like a Nintendo controller |
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