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02-15-04, 09:38 PM | #1 | |||||||
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The Ideal
IP: 2A8C 115D
no explination needed....this is just how it should be
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Like a passionate wine dancing through my veins soft music drifting through my ears on this night of love beneath the lamp light out in the rain's gentle touch twirling within passion and warmed by her smile it is a night of magical mystery listening to the whispers of the trees trapped within glances trying to catch the eye of Aeries roses overflowing with color, an unspoken message our subtle movements in the quiet night's air on that night that our kisses sealed with love Magic weaved through thought and cleaved in stone me and him together sipping champagne beneath the twilight faces illuminated by the moon, hopeless romantics united he says all the right things and I’m trapped within his gaze walk out into the soft night’s rain a mist clings to my hair as we walk hand in hand perfect evening with the man of my dreams everything I’ve ever wanted, a companion of my own cuddling softly together in his bed she’s all I ever wanted in life beautiful, smart, a goddess fallen from heaven holding her close, never to let her get away from me the smell of her perfume entrances my mind kissing her softly, passionately upon her silken lips drawn into her beauty, each kiss getting hotter the sweet taste of her tounge pressing closer into him just taking in the feel of him against me chocolate covered kisses sweeter then wine my hands freely roaming his person our souls melting into one as the heat increases gently kissing her neck, nipping it softly my hands allowed to freely wander the softness of her skin, the warmth of her flesh two bodies pressed together, warm sensual passion ignited each passion filled kiss, each love filled bite sending shivers down my spine, I tremble beneath him like ecstasy flowing through my veins sensations all unknown until now, as I make love with the one not something hollow, and emotionless not just ending some unseen craving true love, passionate love with a man who is true to his being the subtle curves her figure guide my hands fingers dabbling in places before untouched teasing her emotions, drawing out the animal within his touch to my naked breasts causing ecstatic pleasure his fingers roaming within me his every movement pleasurable as our breathing intensifies satisfying his every sexual desire, passionately rubbing him right the intensifying sex causing my breath to grow faster her moans encouraging me, drawing me on working closer and closer to the ultimate high floating up towards the heavens as we shutter beneath each other lost within our own silence and our own heat him still within me, and our souls still merged together as we both reach our peaks, the best of the best now lost within our moans, our passion, our togetherness laying there after a beautiful night her asleep in my arms, held close to me she looks even more beautiful as she lays there resting within my arms as I realize what this is I realize that she must be mine and that I would be nothing without her Realizing that I would never experience a night of love like this again Resting gently in his arms, as he makes me feel safe As I just turn to look into his eyes His gaze makes me tremble with love and with passion And I realize, as I rest in his arms what this is I realize that he must be mine and that I would be nothing without him Realizing that I would never experience a night of love like this again…
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CuZ Im PoEtIcAlLy UnStOpPaBlE
Read My Shit & Gimme Respect
I.J.L. Liberating All From Whack Ass Rhymes
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02-15-04, 10:23 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 062A 25C8
You've got a bit of an inviting writing style methinks, i thought that was going to be too long to keep my attention. Pure insight and emotion, i dont know what it was you put into this... soul? hahaha too tired. Wouldn't change a thing. Well put together, i gdig it
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02-15-04, 10:41 PM | #3 | |||||||
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IP: 686A 11D4
lol thnx man
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~â€-LiBeRaTe Me!â€-~
CuZ Im PoEtIcAlLy UnStOpPaBlE
Read My Shit & Gimme Respect
I.J.L. Liberating All From Whack Ass Rhymes
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02-16-04, 12:14 PM | #4 | ||||
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IP: 52D4 4AA8
hey, that written by two people man? you to blue, her to pink or whatever, this is a school comp so im not sure about the colors. If it was just you than id be a lot more impressed i gotta admit...
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02-16-04, 05:37 PM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: 6DDD 9131
yea it was just me...i colored it different so u could see which side was thought by the guy and which was thought by the girl...altho ive been told i didnt need that lol
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~â€-LiBeRaTe Me!â€-~
CuZ Im PoEtIcAlLy UnStOpPaBlE
Read My Shit & Gimme Respect
I.J.L. Liberating All From Whack Ass Rhymes
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02-17-04, 08:12 PM | #6 | ||||
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IP: EF51 3934
Why is this being slept on.??
Ok this was a very I mean a very good piece.. This piece had a lot of imagery... Like Penskills pieces they always have me picture something this piece did as well..The thought and emotions were like whoa...You are a good poet..I never peeped your pieces keep it up family...Nice the way you typed Blue for you and pink for the girl....Nice My favorite lines was: "drawn into her beauty, each kiss getting hotter the sweet taste of her tounge "Like a passionate wine dancing through my veins soft music drifting through my ears on this night of love beneath the lamp light out in the rain's gentle touch twirling within passion and warmed by her smile it is a night of magical mystery listening to the whispers of the trees trapped within glances trying to catch the eye of Aeries" very nice opener keep it up .. Peace |
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02-17-04, 09:03 PM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: 631C DF1A
thnx mucho dawg feed is much appreciated
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~â€-LiBeRaTe Me!â€-~
CuZ Im PoEtIcAlLy UnStOpPaBlE
Read My Shit & Gimme Respect
I.J.L. Liberating All From Whack Ass Rhymes
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