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Old 03-23-04, 02:51 AM   #1
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I was a lost soul lost child stuck in this game//
loosin my mind goin crazy and I was fillin' insane//
I loved my father and my brother and I still miss them so much//
loss after loss cut me deeper than any knife could touch//
I remember all them late night fights with four fives and knifes//
and when my mans went to jail for twenty five to life//
cause he had to rob that clerk in that liquor store hiest//
he was almost like my brother and we was so damn tight//
but my real brother was just another casulty of war//
I should of went for milk I should of went to that store//
It should of been me cathin' that bullett from the four//
I could never forget that image of him layed out on the flour//
and my dad I pray for, lost a case now he sittin' in jail//
it hurts so much that D block is the letter on his cell//
and we never saw him cause we couldnt afford bail//
I hope he's found god cause I dont wanna see him in hell//

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Old 03-23-04, 02:52 AM   #2
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feed back................
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Old 03-23-04, 05:03 AM   #3
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niggas never give me feedback man...................
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Old 03-23-04, 11:09 AM   #4
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yo its deep son but work on ya flow
topic touched me but you need some structure
just feedin no beef
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Old 03-23-04, 02:06 PM   #5
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That was great stuff! I am feelin' that. The flow and stuff were nice. The vocab could have been betta, but other than that it was really good. Keep droppin'.
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Old 03-23-04, 05:06 PM   #6
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I appreciate the feedback.....
cause its hard to git feedback in here...


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Old 03-23-04, 07:44 PM   #7
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yo dat shit was deep son i like it, it was hot
i lost my brother 2 so i know how u feel and i dont even know my bitch azz popz
.....oh yeah fucc g-unit101....rollin 30, folk nation
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Old 03-23-04, 09:47 PM   #8
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thanx for the feedback......


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