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yo yo yo, i am like tupac cuz of rhymez/
and lyrikaly i can beat-you-up-criminally//
i am a killer and you cant sway me/
because man brendas got a baby// (dope)
can u imagine me being less then the dopest man/~
hell no dawg, cuz im almost as dope as 50 cent man//

Aight checkin in u 1st as u called out............

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R.I.P OMB

To Be Honest...I Don't Know Why I Bothered

Actually hold up this is Part 3...some would say final round so let me get this over and done wit...

(Verse)
Listen up fine mind coz some home truths about to be thrown/
Stop callin me out baby i know u thinkin ur high chairs ur throne/
U about to be dealt perhaps the biggest hit ever blown/
Coz mommy's takin u out ur seat...u've been de-throned/ (See line 2)
Y u keep talkin like u the hype...no-1's feelin u aite/
People jus battle u to up their wins and look good on this site/
U the oldest newbie...they call u the wack ol'G wins u sustained 3/
They lost count at ur loss record...so they started at 15/
I find u an embarassment to battle but i jus can't turn down the offer/
Coz part 3 over now...like a run in wit Pamela Lee...i floored ya/

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To Be Honest...I Don't Know Why I Bothered

finemind's... gonna retaliate to all the ball shit you said/
the bull shits fake, i bet you just copied and pasted this from an rb mate /
my lyrics cure the metal disabled... put your brainwaves streched out... like ropes/
im busting shit your sayin... makin you foolishly unprepared/
i'll make you preassure and sweat... like your a mad dog walking through the serhara dessert/
im no fuckin g... im a canabal, waiting to eat you up... like hanable lecture/
my lines convuse your own lyrics getting twisted in mine/
tangled never untangled, tighted, never unbreakabale/
i got lyrical talent thats always on the league... and it covers you up like you don't even exist/
the ring bell has dinged, rocky-balboa the italain -stallion wins/

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yo yo yo, i am like tupac cuz of rhymez/
and lyrikaly i can beat-you-up-criminally//
i am a killer and you cant sway me/
because man brendas got a baby// (dope)
can u imagine me being less then the dopest man/~
hell no dawg, cuz im almost as dope as 50 cent man//

Aight lets get this uppin aint no-1 sleepin on part mutha fuckin 3 the final round LETS GET THE VOTES UP IN HERE!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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To Be Honest...I Don't Know Why I Bothered

aiight im a break it down:
flow: mad dog
punches: fine mind
metas: fine mind
personals: mad dog
vocab: fine mind
overall: fine mind
it woz a close battle, i read both verses twice but i think fine mind just took it
vote = fine mind

hit up ma battle with n honest vote ya'll
http://community.rapbattles.com/sho...37&page=2&pp=15


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this was a close battle. to be honest....i wasnt impressed by either verse, but you guys have improved. good job. in regards to who won this, im gonna have to give it to mad dog. his verse was just a little bit smoother. keep it up fellas...one.

s.v........c.s.

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Originally Posted by Nick Fletcher. I don't drive an Eclipse, they're chickmobiles.

QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection???
ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE



"I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown




R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love.

Listen up fine mind coz some home truths about to be thrown/
Stop callin me out baby i know u thinkin ur high chairs ur throne/
5...aight line playa, pretty basic vocab, needs more work.
U about to be dealt perhaps the biggest hit ever blown/
Coz mommy's takin u out ur seat...u've been de-throned/ (See line 2)
8...workin wit the second line, that shit was funny!!!
Y u keep talkin like u the hype...no-1's feelin u aite/
People jus battle u to up their wins and look good on this site/
6...nice punch, again basic vocab tho.
U the oldest newbie...they call u the wack ol'G wins u sustained 3/
They lost count at ur loss record...so they started at 15/
4...didnt really like it cuz the rhymin was off.
I find u an embarassment to battle but i jus can't turn down the offer/
Coz part 3 over now...like a run in wit Pamela Lee...i floored ya/
6...aight closer, pretty weak overall spit dawg!!


finemind's... gonna retaliate to all the ball shit you said/
the bull shits fake, i bet you just copied and pasted this from an rb mate /
5...structure off, pretty played line tho!!
my lyrics cure the metal disabled... put your brainwaves streched out... like ropes/
im busting shit your sayin... makin you foolishly unprepared/
1...wtf??? structure off again, it didnt rhyme and work on ure spellin.
i'll make you preassure and sweat... like your a mad dog walking through the serhara dessert/
im no fuckin g... im a canabal, waiting to eat you up... like hanable lecture/
1...wtf??? Where is the rhyme???
my lines convuse your own lyrics getting twisted in mine/
tangled never untangled, tighted, never unbreakabale/
1...NO RHYME!!!
i got lyrical talent thats always on the league... and it covers you up like you don't even exist/
the ring bell has dinged, rocky-balboa the italain -stallion wins/
3...ok there was one rhyme there in the last line but still...BLEH!!

POINTS TOTALS

Mad Dog - 29/50......Pretty weak spit, check out the tutorials before battlin again playa, cuz u need a lotta elevatin!!
Fine Mind - 11/50...WTF??? Ure shit was just plain wack, just work on actually rhymin ure lines before u think about anythin else!!!

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ok,fine mind,wtf,did any line ryhme,i cunt find one,structure completely off,played lines,elavate dawg.

mad dog,not a bad verse,i liked it,some good flow,some multies in theere.nice work

my vote:mad dog

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Mad Dog gets the vote...Much better structure and a more
consistent verse...flowed more and had better content
Mad gets the Vote

dont let these votes/opinions get you down fine mind. just keep workin' on your shit bruh........eventually, im sure you'll do the damn thing.


s.v............big bad c.s.

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Quote:

Originally Posted by Nick Fletcher. I don't drive an Eclipse, they're chickmobiles.

QUESTION: Is it even possible to improve upon perfection???
ANSWER: CRHYME SINDICATE



"I remember this one time I thought I was wrong........but I was mistaken." -Unknown




R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love.