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06-17-04, 11:53 AM
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Flyweight
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Incomplete
IP: 8BEC CACE
Darkness prevails, My vision is Impaired
Im not seeing the world for what it is... Im seeing it through the reflection of the eyes of my girl Its uncommon, the beauty of the eye softens Needle pumps reality through my veins too often Wake up yet again discreet, A Human Obsolete A Bum on the Streets...My Life's Incomplete... But wait a Minute, Poetry runs through my blood As if Diddy ran the City, with a Great Poetic Love Inspiration from the Harlem Rennaissance, It's never too late In case, even if there's a minute left... ...Its a minute Left to take.. Fuck street rules, Gettin brains ain't a Priority Im born with what I have Kickin Knowledge... Till Knowledge Kicked Me... Waken me up again, The dirty bed, sleep With Rats on the street... My brain is focused, but my Life's Incomplete
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Pro.Fess.In.All and that...is cool. SkiddZ posts here too, motherfuckas..
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06-17-04, 01:36 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: A3EA 639E
real gloomy but it was ight a lil try 2 sticc 2 1 point den move 2 anotha topic afta u complete dat 1
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06-17-04, 01:42 PM
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GrOwN aSs MaN
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IP: 3240 794D
i don't like this structure...the rhyming is erratic...but, the imagery is painted well
it doesn't flow well in my opinion because of the lack of a rhyme scheme 1 |
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