Rules iz:
5 to 40 lines
no d.r crew or hate votes
explaine votes
u spit first
no bite / recyclin
due 1 hr
Topic..Drug Deal Gone Bad

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I'm filling a lic on my mind
cause my stash empty
All I got is my two nines and a bottle of henni
I grind so the fiends sniff lines while I supply them wit plenty
right now I'm dry cause my dopeman go locked up for 20
I call this new nigga up
and tell him I need some raw
you now that goodshit to boil up and cook in that glass jar
He tell me to meet his contact man late tommorow
time is come
so I go to the spot wit a new car I borrowed
see a dude outside standing so I stops there
he like yo homey wait here
it's darkout so you now I got my heat near
he comeback wit some bags
I laugh cause he telling me
where the cash?
I put that red dot on him
and I ain't playing laser tag
now he looking mad
so I tell him to give me all the coke and the cash
this dumb motherfucker had a nerve to pull out his Mag
I'n my head i'm like dag
I shoot at him but he bust back and gets me bad
then a nigga come yelling police wit a badge
I stagerdly run to my whip fast
BANG!!!
out of nowhere I get hit
wakeup endup in handcuffs
in the jakes whip
This the real game but I ain't flip
so I hope by this story you remember me
now I got life wit my nigga doing 20
in a Penatintary

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MurkShells

aight thabold letters iz me and tha unbold iz tha man who bien tha bold with <> these b4 and after then are tha police lets do this...

intro...
ayo i play light dese streets up like i was a ar-son-ist//
round ma block nigga call me da street phar-ma-sist//

Lets goo..

ayo i got waat chu need rite here shorty//
well i need a gram of dro but iam a lil short-b//
thats koo dawg how much u got//
i got $8.50..that gonna get me or not//
umm i donno let me see waat i can do//
"""static sound"""
Nigga waat dat i heard..that best not be u//
nigga dont worry u kno id stay true..//
go to tha chest lemme see if u got a wire
na men got ma vest..and i have no fuckin desire//
do it fast nigga bfore i start turnin crazy//
calm down dawg i kno..please dont betrey me//
nigga fuck dat heres da droh..fuckin pay-me
((SIRENZ))
Oh Hell na dawg u done fucked yo life up//
wen i get back out..i gon done fuck yo wife up//
((GUN SHOTZ))
now az da po'z take me away i stay steady blastin
< FREEZE>
5 years iam a be out nigga..so i stay steady laughin
<GET IN THA CAR>
and wen i see yo ass nigga iam a be tellin tha thugs
aint no copz stoppin me nigga iam still sellin tha drugz

e.z nigga

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uppin this muh fuckah dont sleep....

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This a hot ass battle two Bloods wutup !!!vote ya'll
5 star 4 life till I'm gone

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MurkShells

ya'll mufucka's vote on this damn battle please shit uppin for feedback

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MurkShells

This battle wasn't that good aswell, what was a promising topic was ruined. Murk needs to sort his structure out, it was all over the place... looked more like 10 lines stretched to 20. Jokah's was a lot better, but still could be improved. Story tellin was Ok by both of you, but again could be improved. Jokah had the better vocab by far.

v/Jokah

Return the Favour Here: http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134328

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iight thanx uppin this shit yo

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that's your opinion upping for feedback

my structure goes with my style thats how I write I got many styles it was for the topic telling the story betta pimp this how I spit downsouth

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MurkShells

I want some opinons on this battle keep it real and vote on who told the best story

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MurkShells

structure - jokah
flow - jokah
creativity - jokah

was a weak topical but if u have 2 post a vote for some 1 jokah was always gon get the vote

v - jokah

drop a vote on this link .

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134062

ima hve to vote jokah..........
if it wernt 4 the structure/bad flow...
idve gone the ova way cos i actually liked the ova guys story beta

but jokah had the more polished verse,beta vocab structuire n flow

vote-jokah

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=132300

hit this up..jus need 1 vote

Alright This Battle Was Aight. You Guys Both Had The Same View On It, No One Had A Twist. That's Aight Though. i Think Both You Guys Got Some Talent. i Think Jokah Took this One Though Cause He Just Had Better Rhymes And Meta's. Murk If YouUsed Some Hard Metas Or Something You Coulda Had This.

Vote = Jokah

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=134161

-eB

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