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| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
09-03-04, 07:47 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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yo check this out please wat do u all think
IP: 4406 6658
 home is were the heart isi promise u that, thats the reason i protect my family to keep them intact, i want interact with them forever i got their back, they can depend on me im ready to counteract, to any situation that involves a bat, yo enemys fly away cos when i strike ul relapses, u mess with ma family again a plane i wont hesitate to highjack and aim it at ur sack hear this plane go spalt against ur BALLs there's no way u could DODGE that i made a pact with my family il never look back im protecter and keeper and ur a victim of an other terrorist attack. |
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09-03-04, 09:35 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: B52D F626
work on your spelling and keepin all the lines the same width
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09-03-04, 10:14 AM
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IP: A142 3783
I like the concept of the song. You started the first lines off nice...then towards the end you kinda went away from what you were talking about. You said something about a plane into somebody's balls. You could have left that line out. Next time stop and think abit more about how to make your lines better then what you got. But other then that your going to keep movin up. Keep the rappin up and you'll see.
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