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09-17-04, 06:48 PM
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Miss Me?
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Abandoned Masterpiece
IP: 08CF 169D
Abandoned Masterpiece
By: L.I. We were a matchmate in heaven.. the gates opened at first sight... Didnt let anything tear us apart.. making it through the worst fights... Lost my virginity with her.. there was nothing stronger than us... We didnt base our love on sex or impressions.. just trust... Day in and day out it worked.. we would last forever... Until she lost interest.. then began my endeavor... "We should just be friends".. where the fuck this come from?!... Last week you claimed you loved me.. you think im dumb?... Run along to a new guy.. i dont care, get away from me... With her went my heart.. decreased to a depressed degree... Going home upset i cant stand life.. i need rest... Give my thoughts and anger a break from my chest... Laying down on my bed i hear my parents approach the door... My mom walks in and screams.. DO YOUR FUCKING CHORES!!... Still limp with no concern for what my mother wanted... I told her not tonight.. shut the door, feelin daunted... Depression still rising i shut my eyes.. until interrupted... My dad starts yelling at me.. that point i errupted... "LEAVE ME ALONE!".. slam the door, click the lock... Pack a bag and go out the window.. still in shock... The abuse and constant pressure.. all happened in one day... Doze of in the woods.. wondering what tommorow'd portray... Turn to god for guidance.. just wishing for the past... When all was perfect.. & me and kate were gonna last... Praying hillside with a view of the city.. peaceful at times... All my problems cant be pushed aside.. hopes wont climb... After 12 hours of retreat.. i beg of god for an answer... But all hopes were down the tube like having cancer... Walking up to the bridge I think of no better conclusions... & as i lean forward on tip toes i repeat, "I Have To Do This"... R.I.P. James We Miss You...
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That Old School Mother Fucker  Aint That A Bitch? Crhyme Sindicate
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09-17-04, 08:40 PM
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Miss Me?
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IP: 08CF 169D
..................................feedback
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That Old School Mother Fucker Aint That A Bitch? Crhyme Sindicate
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09-17-04, 10:16 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
fuckin dope as fuck!!!!!!! you got the maddest skills ever man:
wordplay: 7/10 vocab: 8/10 metas: 10/10 multi's: 8/10 flow: 7/10 man thats a overall of 8/10 |
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09-18-04, 01:14 AM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
^what he said man you got some dope shti happenin
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09-18-04, 01:43 AM
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The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: D35B 3F85
flow was off and on to me for the most part. Could have used a bit more multies/vocab. Nice rhyme scheme, nice way you through it out there. I'v seen better from you though. Peace.
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Crhyme Sindicate  The unexamined life is not worth living.
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09-18-04, 05:37 AM
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Miss Me?
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IP: 08CF 169D
Thanks guys..shakin off my rust lol...
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09-18-04, 07:28 PM
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Thank You, Come Again
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IP: 1C81 276B
dopeness.....nice everyhting came well all round...check out that mic by wrecker you have some comp....lol
overalll 6.5/10 (I score low...)
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09-19-04, 11:09 AM
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Miss Me?
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IP: 08CF 169D
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09-19-04, 12:34 PM
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Jumpin' Along
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IP: C56C 93CC
damn this was a dope piece.... you had mad emotions.. and feelings going into this piece.... your structure was on point... your flow... was falling off at points... but you got it back toward the end... overall nice drop and keep it up L.I havent seen you in a minute
pz.
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