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09-24-04, 05:10 PM
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one day
IP: 85B8 5CBF
one day i'll be somebody
when that day comes every body will know but now i'm just me which isn't all that bad ya-da-da-meen 
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I've been cursed with this curse/to just blurt this bizzare shit/and it works/to help relieve the tension thats been eating me off my chest recently/and now i can rest again peacefully... -Eminem  P.S. Fuck all ya'll bitches lilkasper5@yahoo.com http://hiphopdirectory.com www.thugzprophesy.com I'M DA REMIX OF TUPAC & THE SEQUAL TO LUDWIG van BEETHOVEN
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09-24-04, 05:13 PM
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IP: 85B8 5CBF
Quote:
 post if you don't understand the poem
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I've been cursed with this curse/to just blurt this bizzare shit/and it works/to help relieve the tension thats been eating me off my chest recently/and now i can rest again peacefully... -Eminem P.S. Fuck all ya'll bitches lilkasper5@yahoo.com http://hiphopdirectory.com www.thugzprophesy.com I'M DA REMIX OF TUPAC & THE SEQUAL TO LUDWIG van BEETHOVEN
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09-24-04, 06:20 PM
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uhhh
it gotta be MUCH longer and deeper http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=150764 ^crit that for me puhhleease I appreciate you took time to write it though I see in yo sig you wanna be PAC... got a bit of work ta do mayn peace ps.I understand it
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09-24-04, 06:33 PM
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hmmmm, i would say this was more of a convo, your having with yourself, try to make your future poems,if any, have more...words, but yes, i can tell you have confidence, but this was not really poem material, in my eyes, not extremely bad, because i have seen worse in this thread, believe it or not, but ok, quick little piece
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