on a highway to hell, hearts syncranized//
stolen hooptie ride, unsanctified//
blood shot eyes, aroma from the cannabis//
sativa remanence stuck to ya finga tips//
glass fo alcohol creates the vechiles floor//
pedal hugs the floor, belly hugs the four//
people come in hoards, slowly decelerate//
open up the doors, metal slugs concentrate//
thugs promptin hate, but these thugs to//
behind enemy lines payin wats been ovadue//
soon it'll be thru, niggas avengin fo u//
petty rivalaries will foreva continue//

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druggie.....lol na its aiight but nutin special/

This was decent, i havent seen anything from you yet, so i assume this is one of your first poems, good flow, try to fix your spelling a bit and grammar, it would make this more enjoyable to read, cus it sounded like a rhyme verse, like a spit,,,,should be more poem like, lyrically,,,but it wasn't bad...by far..i've seen worse

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had a nice flow to it^^^^^^sounded more like a rhyme verse....nice tho....

This ws ok

More like a verse for open mic but not badd,

You need to up ya vocab and work on the way you say shit, its about image and creativity,.

over all not bad and keep droppin

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