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11-23-04, 08:41 PM
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I Will Not Forget U
IP: 642C 6E23
SITTING OUTSIDE AS I LOOK AT THE SUNSET AND THINKING “OH BABY” Da thought of u decease as made my heart bleed , left me with agony I thought u was gonna be here forever , I guess it wasn’t when u grown ur wings Iam banging my head on the wall cause its confusing why u left this world God why u took her, and u knew me and her had an future u watched and observed Seeing u in an coffin its like seeing our future being flowed away down an stream Me and u was like bonnie & clyde raising up crime ratings make dese niggas scream U will always be forever in my heart I always have an image of u in my mind I’ll never say to another girl “you’re the best one I had” u will always have that abind Now as iam writing this verse or called an poem cause iam expressing. my eyes getting a lil red and shady Now my eyes getting watery , wat is this iam feeling down my cheek?, yes it is iam crying cause of u baby Iam feeling an wind blowed behind my back is this an message from u baby telling to me “don’t cry” I take my hand and wipe my heart of tears and leave u in rest , ‘don’t forget me” “sigh” ……….bye FEED BITCHES
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11-23-04, 08:47 PM
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IP: 642C 6E23
Upppppppppppppppppppppppppppin For Feed Dont Sleep Uppin
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its better to have loved and lost than to have never loved before
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11-23-04, 08:57 PM
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Puttin MD On The Map
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IP: 408D D2A2
this was good lots of emotion coulda used a lil dif wordin and a better vocab but u only a newb yet so its excusable....but overall 7/10 newb rating keep it up fam.peace~1
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11-23-04, 08:59 PM
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#4
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New to RB
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IP: 642C 6E23
Aiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii iiiiiiiiiight Ok Uppin For Feedbacks
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its better to have loved and lost than to have never loved before
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11-23-04, 09:03 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
pretty good emotion there...a lil strech lines not bad structure coulda been better...7.8/10...not bad for a newb realy a few multis good emotion really thats what standed out...good lucks homie
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11-23-04, 09:17 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
your not a newb lol
How you know I'm proverse nigga ? 8/10 for the dopess of it lol whats really good?you
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11-23-04, 09:41 PM
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New to RB
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IP: 642C 6E23
Nuttttttttttttttin Mayne Just Chillin Homie Just Chillin ,,,,,,,,,,,thanks For Da Feed Keep It Coming Keep It Coming
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11-24-04, 03:30 PM
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New to RB
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IP: BE68 F055
aiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii iiiiiiiiiiiight uppin for feedback
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