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12-14-04, 06:56 PM | #16 | ||||
Hell yeah
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IP: F5E3 549A
thanks alot man
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12-14-04, 08:15 PM | #17 | |||||
Banned: Cheating
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IP: 5043 32F4
ok well youve elevated a little bit but only on vocab as i see...your starting to force lines...i didnt understand some of that..but it was a good use of vocab and shit you know what i mean...but you also used a good use of emotion and metaphores...
shit man being honest here you are gettin worse..but still good vocabulary...weerd 7.3/10 |
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12-14-04, 08:32 PM | #18 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: 0825 899A
this was a good piece written with feeling, but it was one line in there standing alone, like half a bar with no rhyme, it was the only discouraging thing though.
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12-14-04, 08:43 PM | #19 | ||||
Hell yeah
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IP: F5E3 549A
iight imma work on that next time
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12-16-04, 07:27 PM | #20 | ||||
Hell yeah
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IP: FD58 E3D6
iight upupupupupu
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12-17-04, 07:28 PM | #21 | |||||||
New to RV
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IP: A1DD F1B7
it was alright but i could pul better shit outa my ass. i dont rate other peoples shit cause they all 10/10 in there own way
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12-18-04, 05:06 PM | #22 | ||||
Hell yeah
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IP: FD58 E3D6
thanks man.........
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