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Old 12-15-04, 03:47 PM   #1
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'9/11 Debris Rain'.Ft.Trauma.

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Conclusion..
Shattered Live's Of Distant Wive's Inhabiting The Tranquilent Suburb's.
Vision's On TV Fill Thought's Of Hatred, & Assault On a Nation Of Cursed Word's.
Hijacker's, Manipulate Aircraft & Plough Them Into Two Sturdy, Tower's.
Calling Upon Impact; A Presence Of Brute-Force & International Power.
Deceased Scattered Around Debris, Raining Upon The Head's Of The Active.
Taliban Hoping That The Consequence Of Cowardice Is Rash,U.S. Reactive.
Body's Strewn In Various Position's, Image's Of Past Superstition's.
Fulfilling Nostradamase's Acient, Intermission Accompanied By His Vision
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Trauma-Let It All Out
Devastation in the worst degree, bloodied bodies these don’t breathe.
Death all around me, lives taken, souls set free with no mercy for a plea.
Extreme Religion, never second-guessing a sacrificed kin for the killing.
They’re willing to murder the unholy, in hope of holiness fulfilling.
This evil in man manifested, believing deception from experts at lies.
Totally sold, my bodies yours and write my name in the book of life.
Can I judge this? Women blessing your afterlife, incentive enough for some.
If it was drilled into me from birth, reason in life to die, I’d pick up a gun
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Old 12-16-04, 01:17 AM   #2
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word... its the bomb, thats the shit.
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Spit it from the heart, spit a thousand darts, split ya head apart…
Emcees depart, like rubin carter my hurricane left u scarred…
Like a spiked bat grammatical bar, like a wonderland drug…
Tumble - ing like a flagon of rum and 2 blunts, like the funk baby…
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Old 12-16-04, 10:46 AM   #3
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This was also one of the more elevated drops in the om section.
Both of your flows, are on point and make it a good read.
Structure is there, making it an easier read.
I did appreciate the metas, and the comparisons made by Trauma in this piece, I could see where you are coming from.
Conclusion, definetly has some good vocabulary coming through in here, making this a more "elite" read, meaning that quite obviously all the e-gangsters won't be able to read this.
Trauma definetly had an interesting point of view in this subject..

"Can I judge this? Women blessing your afterlife, incentive enough for some.
If it was drilled into me from birth, reason in life to die, I’d pick up a gun."

^Interesting statement.

Conclusion:

"Body's Strewn In Various Position's, Image's Of Past Superstition's.
Fulfilling Nostradamase's Acient, Intermission Accompanied By His Vision."

Brilliant line, entwining the prophet, or seer, Nostradamus.

Great drop.
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Old 12-16-04, 10:50 AM   #4
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http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=166416

If you could I would really appreciate it, if you could hit that up with a couple honest opinions. It is one of my recent om's.
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Old 12-16-04, 05:37 PM   #5
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^ yeah......good vocab, structure, flow.....everything....this has been one of the better om's in here...lately people post anything for an om......good drop......
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Old 12-17-04, 02:31 AM   #6
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upppinnnnnnnnn..............
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Spit it from the heart, spit a thousand darts, split ya head apart…
Emcees depart, like rubin carter my hurricane left u scarred…
Like a spiked bat grammatical bar, like a wonderland drug…
Tumble - ing like a flagon of rum and 2 blunts, like the funk baby…
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Old 12-17-04, 06:58 AM   #7
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Old 12-18-04, 11:47 AM   #8
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