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04-01-05, 01:23 PM | #1 | ||||||
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IP: E3C9 F7CB
I'm feeling alienated, basically trapped inside a life
Of daily hating between the blacks and the whites With races at a standstill rather than in a run ahead No love, just a nation blaming eachother instead Ordinarily I would of gave up, fuck all the bullshit But making a change seemed more benificial than to quit I'm staring out at this world, its a cold place to live People seem to thrive on revenge rather than forgive Can't rely on someone else to see that you survive Dying sometimes seems easier than being alive I trust few, most friends are foes in desquise With hatred hidden behind thier phony smile Look at thier eyes to decide, the eyes never lie A window to thier mind you can read whats behind You'll be suprised what you find, trapped and confined You were blind to thier true feelings of malign My Reply Link
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04-01-05, 03:11 PM | #2 | ||||
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IP: 3240 794D
Hm... This was a pretty decent drop
Structure was okay , Wordplay was okay , could have been better... Concept was good ... i like the refferance to racism .. Overall keep it up . you had a nice drop .. good topic hope to see another drop from you .. 7.5/10
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04-01-05, 03:27 PM | #3 | |||||
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IP: 35BE D2AB
I understood dat perfectly...I had no questions bout "what did dat mean"
I can relate to all da linez in dat piece Nice job,Origin
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04-01-05, 05:07 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: 995C FBA1
decent drop feelin this shit but like bone said
fix ya wordplay shortin your lines an it ill flow a lot better over 7/10just cuz it was only 16bars..........CB83holla
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