Battle Rules:

10-Lines
No Crew Votes
No Recycling
No Biting

The jury vs ILLUNITICS

Minimum posts to vote: 250

Check in by: 05-06-05 at 09:59 PM

Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in.

Black Queen has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-04-05 08:57 PM.

Young Blaze has ACCEPTED this battle on 05-05-05 10:10 AM.

Most of your battle are with Newbies and Wack Emcees
you lack plenty, hold no Punches like a Pitcher that's half empty
You ain't got PHAT shit your verse is Stretch like a FAT kid
i rap quick, call you Warm-Up cuz you need more Practice
and my punches are like music..they leave lasting re-percussions
And when vets talk of his skills..its all ancient history discussions
and to tell your the truth, you aren't really my homie
i'll break your legs, and get you to walk man, like sony
so i'll break you off easy, and you'd better be left dead
watch me drop knowledge on him, and hope it hits his head

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Ight Crew BAttle TikZ ....what up .....Solo What up....Teph what up...
Here sum Punchs.....

When I spit, I even make the "ground sick" like I "puked on rubble”
Cuz Tikz will just "silence ya clique"(click) like "muting seat buckles
Shove my fist through her gums make em hand me her chewins
Queen is ruined i'll "open her chest" and leave her"showing more heart" than a "Family Reunion”….
Any 1 of yall Boys Come Disarm Me holdin them Toys Than Point Em And Harm Me…
yall never Grew-Nuts, i'll leave ya `CREW-CUT,` like `T.J.` was Joinin Da Army…(the jury)
Rippin threw yah blouse’s,Queens body parts found In Couches.
Leave Her “Scared Ta Post” Like “Fence Builders”Near Haunted House’s….
Make Black lose it when I spray flame leave this lame Ho useless…
U can hate..but I'll stay ahead of "B" like Straight "A" Students….

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Daaaaaaaamn, okay, we won the crew battle already, so this is basically for y'all records.....

not bein biased towards fam, but Black Queen, you came basic as fuck....Blaze should have this one in the baaaag...

checkin polls...

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uppin fo votes kiddies nice verse blaze............

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uppppppppinnnnnn........good battle queen.........

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clsoe battle really close
metaphor-young blaze
opener-queen
ender-queen
vocab-blaze
punchlines-blaze
flow-queen
strucutre-queen
flow transition-blaze
overall=blaze
i have to kick it out to blaze on this one but a really close battle

return the favor man http://community.rapverse.com/showb...lest+freestyler

Upppppppppiinnnnnn................................ ....

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Voted For: Black Queen

BLACK QUEEN

Most of your battle are with Newbies and Wack Emcees
you lack plenty, hold no Punches like a Pitcher that's half empty
^^seemed a lil forced to rhyme..not a great punch 4/10
You ain't got PHAT shit your verse is Stretch like a FAT kid
i rap quick, call you Warm-Up cuz you need more Practice
^^lil forced to rhyme again...lil beta punch 5/10
and my punches are like music..they leave lasting re-percussions
And when vets talk of his skills..its all ancient history discussions
^^decent bar...decent punch 6/10
and to tell your the truth, you aren't really my homie
i'll break your legs, and get you to walk man, like sony
^^gud wordplay..but not a great punch 5/10
so i'll break you off easy, and you'd better be left dead
watch me drop knowledge on him, and hope it hits his head
^^o.k closer..5/10

overall...25/50...50%...picked up a lil towards the end...
you could do with uppin your creativitie..few gud concepts but the way u worded em let u down, also couple bars seemed a bit forced to rhyme

YOUNG BLAZE

When I spit, I even make the "ground sick" like I "puked on rubble”
Cuz Tikz will just "silence ya clique"(click) like "muting seat buckles
^^wordplay impressive...but i felt this was a lil self glory...5/10
Shove my fist through her gums make em hand me her chewins
Queen is ruined i'll "open her chest" and leave her"showing more heart" than a "Family Reunion”….
^^not really a diss...more a statement 4/10
Any 1 of yall Boys Come Disarm Me holdin them Toys Than Point Em And Harm Me…
yall never Grew-Nuts, i'll leave ya `CREW-CUT,` like `T.J.` was Joinin Da Army…(the jury)
^^again gud wordplay..but this isnt a punch or diss..4/10
Rippin threw yah blouse’s,Queens body parts found In Couches.
Leave Her “Scared Ta Post” Like “Fence Builders”Near Haunted House’s….
^^lovin the wordplay again...for that ive gotta give u 6/10..but still not really a diss..upp ya personals
Make Black lose it when I spray flame leave this lame Ho useless…
U can hate..but I'll stay ahead of "B" like Straight "A" Students….
^^nah...great wordplay,but more self-glory that a direct punch..4/10

overall...23/50...
close battle...i really wanted to go with blaze coz u got sum sick wordplay...but i cudnt spot a direct punch at your opponent, ya lines were kinda self glory or statements, neither of u had personals..but black queens hit were more directed at her opponent..

vote black queen..no hate

RETURN AN HONEST ONE BOTH Y`ALL
PLEEEEEEEZ
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thx fo da vote pimp ill return dat favor uppin fo more votes

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Voted For: Young Blaze

it's clear who the winner is... Young Blaze the metaphors were too sick your verse was the most creative and hard hitting..

the "silence ya clique">"muting seat belts"
the Family Reunion line was sick
you had some multis that i was feeling.
the "scared to post" like "fence builders" near haunted house line was an OH MY GAWD line... creative with metaphors is always a plus, no played lines from what i saw.. the closer was good as well, just not as hard hitting as the first portion of your verse..

black queen your verse was pretty basic, with the metaphors and what not, nothing stood out as creative or a nice twist in your lines, you didn't come near as hard as you have in the past. the walk-man line is played tto death as well as the "dropping knowledge line" that's why i feel you lost, you had some played lines here and there, just work on coming with some more creative punchlines and if you do decide to use played concepts make a good twist at least...

this was one-sided however, winner = Young Blaze

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