http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=192960 reppin da bean till i d i e...tell me watchu think...rote it a while back...kinda whack...dat wasnt meant to ryme....



from jp to dot da rox to eastie/ dont matta where in da bean i spit rymes beastly/ wether in the west in westie da south i southie/ chicks packed wit fat asses and tyte pussies/ also got pimps in hyde pahk and brigh-ton/ we all gangstas and thugs in the streets of bos-ton...



boston...home of the celts, pats, and red sox/ mess wit 1 da rest cum in big flox/ a millions plus sum more/ packed wit 9's 45's shanks all at ur front door/ girls guys hoes pimps hard to tha core/ we got big things hard as rock like the fantastic 4/ fuck around u get left at da bottom of the boston harbah/ we'll push ya fade back fartha then ur local barbah/ or we can toss ya ass off tha john hancock/ u'll die even if ur a good guy lik star trek's spock/ and if ya dont lik jon we got da prudential/ spittin rymes of fire writin songs suspensful/ get off da "t" at square kendall/ savin hill jfk ashmont or andrew/ summa da stops of dot we dem thugs'll kill u/ or u can get dropped off in da streets of murdapan/ filled wit pushers and pimps aint afraid to murkaman/

in boston....

from jp to dot da rox to eastie/ dont matta where in da bean i spit rymes beastly/ wether in the west in westie da south i southie/ chicks packed wit fat asses and tyte pussies/ also got pimps in hyde pahk and brigh-ton/ we all gangstas and thugs in the streets of bos-ton...

boston....kids blazin be 4 skool so dey always tardy/ kill more dudes ina day den da boston t party/ if u dont live here den da streets aint fond/ be on da rong 1 u'll be wetta den swimmin at da frog pond/ u'll lose in a duel 9's already cocked in our pocket/ so it only takes a sec to pull da trigga and pop it/ neva on safety cuz we can handle our guns/ cars shoes rockin spokes 5 stars and even spinnin 1's/ da bean got rivals yeah fuck new york/ weapons stop dey flow lik a butt cork/ we da champs ..we swept da cards in da series/ grls big brested flashin 34 double d's/ pats took it again against da panthers/ otha cities so scared they went n bought sum pampers/ we da best city jus face da facts/ n dis song is fire lik mixin matches wit axe

u know im reppin boston....

from jp to dot da rox to eastie/ dont matta where in da bean i spit rymes beastly/ wether in the west in westie da south i southie/ chicks packed wit fat asses and tyte pussies/ also got pimps in hyde pahk and brigh-ton/ we all gangstas and thugs in the streets of bos-ton...

Boston...to me most inportant dot/ deen here ma hole life its my favorite spot/ sum parts descent otha madd ghetto/ even wack mcs round here got da ill flow/ savin hill fields corner neponset u.c./ dis shits a hit aint even on a cd/ even tho we repped by a fat wyte guy thomas menino/ our rymes so hott make you wish 4 el nino/ had famous battles at the heights/ i've battle diff races includin wytes/...black and asian/ rymes spicy hott lik cajun/ chillin in da pahk on da duck boat/ when u in da water i promis u wont float/ dis is home of gangtas whity Bulger/ wanter 4 murda i thought i told ya/ in da bean ima ghetto soldier/ and u no ima pimp i already sold her

chillin in da bean....

from jp to dot da rox to eastie/ dont matta where in da bean i spit rymes beastly/ wether in the west in westie da south i southie/ chicks packed wit fat asses and tyte pussies/ also got pimps in hyde pahk and brigh-ton/ we all gangstas and thugs in the streets of bos-ton

thugs chillin in the projects of c-town/ even if u wer teddy bruschi u couldnt take me dwn/ cuz ma gats 2 heavy/ roll up flickin switches on da chevy/ u...couldnt even park on my street/ it be stolen leave ya walkin home on ur 2 feet/ yeah...dats boston 4 u bitches/ dem b (boston)- boyss leave u in stitches/ rymes deadly...snedin kids to boston medical/ we ruthless here..i been tellin u/ kids wanna end up in the cemetary/ i got more rittin books den da copley library/ this is boston (boston)/ ktch us flossin (flossin) bitches we tossin(tossin) u b cum forgotten(gotten) lik da osman (osmans)/ da bean home to boston strangla/ 2 day we pull up and bang ya/ reppin 6-1-7 till i d.i.e/ if yall dont no da name its b-l-i-b

i luv boston....

from jp to dot da rox to eastie/ dont matta where in da bean i spit rymes beastly/ wether in the west in westie da south i southie/ chicks packed wit fat asses and tyte pussies/ also got pimps in hyde pahk and brigh-ton/ we all gangstas and thugs in the streets of bos-ton

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giv me sum feed back....

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iight iiight ima give props on this one kid.. gotta rep tha city.. nice shit.. you gon come record wit us this weekend wit ric ?

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ya ima prob be der

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giv me more feedback people...good...bad...idc

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wen u read it tell me wat u think........

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Wow...

You've got potential judging from the little I read, but I didnt read much. You structure was horrible and your lines were way too basic.

Try working on your structure and creativity, then drop another one

No hate

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good shit good shit not that great.....bad structure......not that good of vocab......but u got maddddd potential put some more multi's in there enhance ur vocab nigga ull be unstoppable keep it up man keep reppin ya hood........6/10

structure was fucked...but other wise its aiite...u got great potential jus build it up...i got a tip 4 u its to count ure syllabelles....u get me....repp ya hood always good...but boston gay.....na jokes....CHI-TOWN stand UP....that my hood

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this was iight, nothing special....everytime u post....people tell you to fix your structure.....when you gunna do it boy?....lol no hate just askin......ur rhyme scheme was mad basic....but u did say this was old my b....so just up on ya shit for now...ad multis.....and as ur verse goes along enhance ur vocab to make it more enjoyable to read.....for structure....have each line end at the same spot for good flow and better structure.l.....rhyme scheme just think of more creative word play and get more metas and there...youll be fine 5/10...man keep postin keep elevatiing....

and possibly vote ony my battles since i was kind enough to analyze ur OLD o/m and give you more than proper feed back

ummm.......yea this was iight...wiicked bad structure sure u know how to up on that.....up on ur multis vocab...but this was straight from the heart...always gutta rep ya hood....i rep the same hood ayyo u wanna battle?

too bad u aint from there......u cant even spell it....uppins corner<~~not how u spell it......ya....go fake ur shit sum where else.....

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I didn't even read that shit. But word my homie on reppin Beantown. that's what's up. chain gang