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best ive written
IP: F972 0E70
this may be the best ive writtin so gimme some good feed PLEASE
tried to touch the stars... i fell burned and bruised battered and used to battefield below i was accused the crime was comprehended as a criminal offense i pleaded to the prosecuter to pass the tense please proceed and stop speakin of past events my last offense, rape, i now practice absenensce no sexual ho's, just confessional flows let me go.. i cant run because mexicos closed the jury judged my case with a jagged face reviewin my case so rapid its like a rabbit race judge reappeared to re-establish order in the court i sit in my seat quietly as the judge reads the report fast foward to the fences forty feet high from the ground examine every exit as convicts escape only to be found so i plan my perfect plot on my path out of prison see a view of violence disapearing out of my vision all the sudden i see satan and im sufferin burns i reached for the stars sorta slipped up nd learned that the heavens are a hope never meant to hold i sold my soul to satan so now my body is cold the burns become a blizzard as my body freezes blood ran red now runs blue as the skies breezes i awake in aww at the site of an assailant above me i see the shank in his grasp as i laugh and say... "oh isnt this lovely" ![]()
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Do Re Mi
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uppin.. get the feedback going.. dont sleep
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Do Re Mi
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IP: F972 0E70
dont sleep.....
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BeAnToWN rEp
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IP: 28AD 5545
good shit sik....im feelin dis one...i thought it was kinda funny at the end....good flow...keep progressin...u keep gettin betta and betta....
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~Break Bred or Play Dead~
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IP: FFBA C081
Im def feelin ya Emotion and Vocab..those are 2 things i focus most on
so i was feelin that..it flowed well and i liked the structure def hot piece 8/10
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IP: B565 2BCF
lol.......ending made me laugh.
ok, structure was def the best part of this piece, made everything flow nice and smooth, vocab could have been better but it suited the piece's read. flow was solid and on point throughout, imagery picked up more and more as the piece went along and the emotion was meh, iffy. overall though i really liked the way this flowed consistently throughout and the story was pretty good too with a nice ending. keep it up slim
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Do Re Mi
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IP: F972 0E70
yo thanks for tha props ^^ ya the avy is supposed to strike fear into the hearts of tha haters haha.. loookin to get some good feed.. maybe a nomination?
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Do Re Mi
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IP: F972 0E70
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=199804
my link.. shots in tha night << 2nd hottest OM on RV.com next to this one of course ![]()
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Middle Weight
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IP: CF74 5D3A
1. one hell of a poetic flow right here enjoyed this piece for real
2, but as for a rapper flow only 4/10 Last edited by MADDRAPPER : 07-31-05 at 12:47 AM. Reason: add some |
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One Mic
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IP: 38B5 0CC0
yo, shit man this woz really tite actually, cuz this is one of the few pieces that i've seen that actually keeps a good flow and adds multis whilst actually telling a gud story. i'm feelin this alot. 9/10
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Do Re Mi
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IP: F972 0E70
thanks man.. feelin the love up in here give some more feedback good or bad as long as its explained ill return tha favor no doubt
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Bann The Deed NOT The Breed
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IP: E8C7 F98A
yea that was tight props for doing this
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Do Re Mi
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IP: FB48 3F52
thanks fam.. uppin for more feed
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IP: D88C 8916
First One 2 Read On This Site N Was Dope So I Already Know This Board Has Potential
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Do Re Mi
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IP: FB48 3F52
yo thanks for tha props.. keep it comin kiddos
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