AX DOGG= BLUE
SHODOWN=RED





When I was young I never though in Grown Up's life
with a nine under my pillow and depending on a rifle
I wake up, put on my chain and its always pain
whateva I do is the same to the game I'm playin
my cornrows hurt so bad, I fucked up the dreams I had
My girl is always mad, I lost half of my squad



Growin up in the streets, hustlin everyday
workin my ass off.....lifes pain just to get paid
i look in the mirror every morning to a villian
dressed black on black...Criminal feelin...
walkin the streets on my own..only my shadow
follows and guides me.......my feelings get shallow


gunshots errday, my cuzin's on jail for poaching
and my niggaz need me as a coach, I feel like a roach
bout ta get squashed, I can't be lighthearted
My life runs like an arpeggio, like if it was farted
the hood's always on war, my nigga stole m car
My life is keeped in a jar, all this became a mental scar


Drenched..........all soaked in blood and pain
look up to the sky yet pain keeps fallin like rain
keeps pourin and pourin, wont stop its hauntin
flourishin me tired..........i sit in the dar yawning
wit the shotgun in hand...........magnum in the other
to my left my moms yellin.....to the right is my brother


Ax Dogg walks the dog in the morning fog
when I less expect it, I get stomped like a bug
can't get the rats of the rug, The Pain revolution
I ain't gettin killed, I come from a soulja institution


feeling so down nothing i can do.......
lookin at my family......it turns me black and blue
there was nuthin in my mind...except for my pain
feelin it every single day....driving me insane.....
lying on the bed all soaked in blood.......its just begun
all thats left of me is a dead body...in hand is the shotgun!

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nice verses showdown.....

and I like the way you arranged my verse lol... good track

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Bizzacckkk

...........uppin................

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Bizzacckkk

uppin this man WERD!!!

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i really couldnt get into this, sorry man... flow seemed on but as i cant hear it you cant really comment on flow... content was meh and kinda played out aswell, not bad for what it was i guess

Bump Bump :bump Bump

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Bizzacckkk

the topic was definitely played. vocab was horrible. structure worked so when i tried rapping it, it flowed.

vocab horrible??

hmmmm

*cries* haha

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Bizzacckkk

hahahah man werd yo bumbin!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!this shit



uppin!!!

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This was meh to me. Vocab was meh. Content was meh. Flow was cool. But it was meh. I know Ax and this was no where near his best. I don't know shodown but a llittle lelvtion in vocab could help. And uhh...yea it was meh. 6.5/10http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=208371 . Don't hate vote.

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lol................ thnx

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Bizzacckkk