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09-23-05, 08:11 PM | #1 | ||||||
New to RV
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Intro-Fuck Them
IP: 9602 A848
http://community.rapverse.com/showp...79&postcount=13
http://community.rapverse.com/showp...72&postcount=18 ^Dont kno how links work yet. Damn son roll out the welcom wagon Time to spit some shit hot like a Drag-On Ima hit u so hard ull tear ur rectus Take a swing it would be like punching a cactus But shit id like to think im unique Flow is anemic, with unbelivable physique But the thing is people have fucked up the game They listen to hot rappers and try to sound the same Thats why rap's filled with same sound singing about fame Same beat, similar lyrics, just a different name {Chorus} Shit dis is da intro Lighten up on high dro Commonly just like Common,I lay back and let it Be And like Talib, try to get Equality Fuck that, trying to get out fuck the equals ye..ye ye ye ye, dis is da prequel FUCK EM Damn dawg u so gangsta, nah boy u just stupid You had ur gangsta raps i run and up and took it... ...Shook it Switched it up and made it into something incredible added a better lyrics made it a bit more edible.... ....for your brain, so absorb this shit, Indluge the lyrics till ur eyes are red To complex? Is u stupid? Dat was a rethorical question U fucked with the game, i hope u was using protection Cuz people sing bout gansta shit, when really they soft I dont mean im hardcore im just sayin enough... ...of these fuckin impostors the game's a rollercoaster so ride it u bitch and this is an internent website, please dont expect to get rich as a matter or fact stop singing about it there is enough "loaded" nucca's, the game's over crowded {Chorus} Shit dis is da intro Lighten up on high dro Commonly just like Common,I lay back and let it Be And like Talib, try to get Equality Fuck that, trying to get out fuck the equals ye..ye ye ye ye, dis is da prequel FUCK EM |
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09-23-05, 08:20 PM | #2 | |||||
The Topical Juggernaut
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IP: A2CF 2639
I'm not into Text much, but I have done it. First off I think your structure could use a little work, always helps. If you upped your vocab usage abit, you'd make the piece come across a little harder, toss in some nice multies and you're looking good an creative, with just a bit more work involved.
All in all, this was a good opener for your first RV drop (i'm assuming due to posts, might be an alias) correct me if i'm wrong. Nice job man, keep it up. Peace.
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