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Old 10-13-05, 01:48 PM   #16
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uppin!!!!!! c'mon, 50 views and hardly any replies!!??
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Old 10-14-05, 12:57 PM   #17
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*cough*...........
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Old 10-14-05, 04:43 PM   #18
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But when written breaks boundaries and builds bonds.
writing captures moments,so that one moment lives on.

I Neva Read Ah OM Like This Before Lol Dis Shit Was Aight Tho, Feelin Ya Concept & Da Examples U Gave...Serious

8/10
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Old 10-14-05, 09:15 PM   #19
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good! I try to be original lol! I'll RTF on w/e man, thanx 4 the feed...
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Old 10-15-05, 08:23 AM   #20
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like your sig........ ok........ great metas and voc......... nice, original concept........ not sure what was goin on with the structure, but it wasn't bad....... wow....... this iz a really good piece........ chip iz my boy, he knows what he's talkin about........ i'd give u an overall 9/10..... keep writing...........
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Old 10-15-05, 08:29 AM   #21
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Thanx V.much for the feed..

lots of peeps dont get structure on RV so lemme explain. I Study poetry and the use of structure is V.important in a piece. Short, quick lines are absolute, they give a sense of making a statement,like 'Diction is my addiction' I've tried to use alliteration, enjambment, short and long lines to create the effect that i want. I duno if i've succeeded lol but i tried. For evry1 on RV that thinks structure of poetry or OM's shuld be all the lines the same length, that is wrong.
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Old 10-15-05, 05:39 PM   #22
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SOMEBODY FINALLY GETS IT!!!!!!!!! B = my new favorite poet!
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Old 10-15-05, 06:08 PM   #23
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ooooh yeah! lol
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Old 10-16-05, 12:06 PM   #24
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wow.. this was beautiful :'(

You got that "way with words" thing.
I liked this alot. RTF on.. nah I'm playin.

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Old 10-16-05, 02:51 PM   #25
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lol thank uuuuuu deph! any1 else? any1.........is this thing on?
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Old 10-16-05, 03:26 PM   #26
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guess not goddamit, if any1 looks in here plz leave feed cuz im desperately tryin to get better.
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Old 10-21-05, 10:25 PM   #27
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hey good piece fo sho.......

Spilt tears, mixed with ink,
create a cocktail of broken dreams;
or stories of purest love.
Language can be a barrier.
^^^^fav lines

u got some mad talent aint neva seen none of ur shit on here b4 but i sure would like to c some more of it...........1
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