lol, the time in the topical is 20 min n it took me just as long to read

you do a good job settin the scene and the characters, by the end i know exactly what Mark is like, lots of emotion and then you tie it all together at the end, and give the whole thing meaning
only thing i dont like is how you worded the last part sounded like you were basically explaining the rest of the piece... which you were, and it was good you did cause no one would see a lot of that, but u shoulda worded it differently then "the bus symbloizes..."

VERY good drop, better than most of what i've read on this site

RTF to my OM, http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=219595

Finally....

Appreciate the in depth feedback...and Mentalz thanks nominating this piece bro

I will try returning the feedback if I find time tomorrow