This was real good. The way you illustrated the similies and metaphors in this and compared it to a gladiator. This is a very difficult thing to do, write about something and compare it to something using mainly metas, so, props for that. I thought that everything else was fine, shorter bars coulda made for a more appealing read but i still enjoyed it lots. nice job.
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=220459

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